Hope this story updates soon! I'm really enjoying it!

I don't think I mentioned this in my first review but I really really love the relationship Marlon has developed with Winry, Ed and Al. That's definetly one of the big reasons I fell in love with your story. I can't stop smiling and feeling warm inside imagining Marlon hanging out with these pre-K tots. Like, it's all just so warm and cozy and free and nice and I love how it's paced in a slow but deep way. It's what I imagine would be a perfect tale to read on a quiet rainy day. I know I've said it so many times already but I honestly just can't shut up about how special this story is. I've never read or seen a "sent to another world" scenario like this one before. I was so suprised when I realized it was going to take place in the Elric brothers' and Winry's childhood. I love that it does. It's just so fun reading about them being so small and impressionable and adorable and huggable and innocent instead of totally kickass like they usually are. It's a really nice snd welcoming change of pace, y'know? I guess It's also because it reminds me a lot of when I used to work with kids that were this age too. So carefree and simple and not at all like adults.

(well ok, maybe I just didn't gush about it enough like I should of done earlier)

Your story is really making me reflect a lot on what's going on around me rn. I'm not sure where your from (I'm sure wherever you are you've heard by now tho) but theres a lot of unsettling news that have been filtering in these last few days. So early into the new year too... So me finding this story has to be some odd form of fate or something. It's been making me really contemplative (not just for it's war themes tho. Although ironically enough I was just getting back into a history buff phase particularily about the World Wars right before 2019 ended... Irony can be really seriously freaky sometimes).

Anyways, sorry about my personal tangent. I just wanted to thank you so much for writing this story. It's been such a pleasure to read. I would love to see more of it in the future (I really hope it hasn't been dropped! Not after such a sudden suspensful shift in the story!) or any other personal works of your own one day (I'm serious about the writing blog, you gotta tell me your pen name!).

And with nothing left to say I bid you adieu :)

I was planning on reading until the last chapter to review, but I give (it was honestly getting harder and harder NOT to). So I just HAVE to sing my praises to you about this story! First, saying this is awsome is a serious understatement. This was never at all what I was expecting it to become. I've had so much fun watching an adult Marlon see the world through the eyes of a small child. Of seeing her become such close companions with both Ed, Al, and Winry. I can't tell you how much I've laughed or been moved or just plainly entertained by Marlon's musings and observations. I noticed you mentioned in an earlier chapter about a thr beginning being a slow start (a lot of these chapters have that kind of slowness to them actually), but I love that that is your style. That you neatly tuck and fold and bend and carefully piece things together until it's so full to the brim with such a curious excess of thoughtful things to say. I can tell that you let your words spill onto the page, unhindered. And that you have a lot of musings inbetween thoughts that remain in the margins. Sometimes I run into writing that feels so stifly and rigidly structured. It's not bad, or sloppily planned by any means. It's actually quite clean and solid, but also kind of lifeless and has like zero personality y'know? With your narration... it feels like you took a room that wasn't originally yours but made it your own, adding everything that described who lived in it to every surface. It's personal and flows out freely and playfully. It's stylish in that honest, creative and fun kind of way.

You are so incredibly talented. The way you bring life and character to the narration is astounding. I wish I could tell you how in awe I am of just the way you choose certain words or phrases or add small random thoughts into the narrative that gives it so much charm. I rarely read OC-centered fics. There are very few I've read and even fewer that I've come to appreciate. Right now this is definetly one of my most favorite FMA fics that I've ever gotten the opportunity to read. I just expected this story to be another self-insert, tropey romance dropped splat in the middle of the storyline (nothing wrong with cliches of 'course!) but you made it so much deeper, just, so much more then what was expecting and...I- oh my god I actually want to cry from how amazing this story is I'm not kidding! How genuine and surprising and inspiring and just how so so so good it is!

I was already reeling from Marlon regaining her memory back last chapter (the way you had her remember and bring the reality of her situation rushing back to the surface after all the initial calm and warm fluff was a kick to the gut. That peaceful childhood-like atmosphere totally shattered as the sinking feeling came the longer Malorn digested what position she had truly been put in). And then this last chapter in particular deeply resonated with me. Not because of what's happening in the story itself but because of what it means. Lately those same themes have been resurfacing for me once again irl, reminding me of how uncertain tommrow still is but that there are still moments that allow us to enjoy and forget about those big things, and just generally a lot of other sappy stuff I won't bother you with. Maybe it's also because part of what I'm going though is sometimes from a secondary perspective. Much like Marlon.. But anyways, where the last chapter was a total sniper shot to the chest, this one left a more subtle kind of impending resignation for me. The kind that builds and leaves you with a dull understanding. I don't even have the words to express how deeply moved I was about what you wrote just now. About fathers and their reasons, about selfish and selfless choices, about comforting a child going through that kind of confusion. I don't even think I could even begin to know how to handle something like that. Maybe it's because it was actually a 20-something year old in a 5 year old's body comforting a 5 year old Edward Elric (and it would of definetly come off different if it had been Marlon comforting Al) but it all just felt really real for a moment. Real and raw and like this is what actually happens. These are things people carry with them for the rest of their lives.

Sorry, I'm probably sounding really crazy and too honest and I've totally been rambling too long. But... this story really is such a treasure. I am so glad I found it. I'm so glad I picked it up. I'm gonna share this with anyone whose already watched this anime (or manga!) because how can I not? Please, please, please never stop writing. Don't ever stop telling stories. You have such an incredible and beautiful voice that is one in a trillion and I'm so glad your thinking about starting that blog and I totally want in! I will literally read anything you ever publish.

Ooooh!
GOOD JOB!
I really like this story, looking forward to the next update!
Greetings!

I love your long writing! It makes it all the more satisfying when it comes out! This chapter i noticed was a little philisophical. . . Did you quote that part from something or come up with it yourself . . ?
Also, please don't drop the story.
Your charecter could control plants, air, or water. Air would involve lightning, not to mention when she would use alchemy it would look she was summoning things from nothing. she might even be able to change the weather. . . Which really only consits of changing the tempreture on a large scale.

This is amazinngggggg! SO FLIPPIN GUUUDDDDD. I love this fiction sooo much and your way of writing it! You've taken something like FMA and made a real piece of art! *cough* totally not fangirl squealing right now *cough* nyuhuhuhahahamooma… ignore my craziness, teehee.
Keep up the work! I hope to see the next chapter soon~ x3
Also, don't rush your work~ Better to put out something good late than something crappy early, yeah? 3 luv your work and luv youuuu!

I hope that you don’t get offended now that you get one more silent reader.

Woohoo~ an update! Thank you! The story is starting to get more excited now. Look forward to the next chapter!

Don't worry about being too late, what matters is the quality of the chapter. I think this one is just a bit rushed, but I understand that this is a critical plot point, so just try not to rush too much in the next one! Always waiting and eager for another chapter, thanks so much!

I am hyped to see a new chapter! Your writing's excellent as usual. I honestly love the way you portray the characters, both original and canon. I don't post reviews often, mainly because I have no idea how to accurately describe how EPIC everything was, but I just really wanted to tell you I'm a huge fan!

WAHHH an update! As always I really like your storytelling...I'm so excited to see what happens next! I think you convey Marlon's friendship with Ed Al and winry really well...You can tell how much she likes them but also how she knows she has to move on? Idk how to express it but her feelings really reach through I think! Her resolve! I also like Marlon's struggle with being a fake genius...She has the knowledge but not the actual quick thinking and reasoning, and that part really makes her realistic! AND I also like the short descriptions of the classmates! They were really cute and it makes you realize that the town is full of people other than the main characters...I hope they'll come back later, even if it's in a small way! SORRY for this huge chunk of text it's 1:30 am and I'm incoherent! Looking forward to the next chapter of any of your works bc honestly I read them all bc your writing style is just so good! Thanks for updating!

I'd say seeing this chapter was refreshing if half of it wasn't so depressing... ' Well, I still enjoyed it, and I am very intrigued by the alchemy idea (I had to read Al's explanation, like, 3 times before I finally got what he meant, that brat XD), and what Mal is gonna do now... Please tell me Dadarino is gonna be okay! ;-;

I can't wait for the next chapter, your writting is amazing, the way you word things, i love it, though your chapters have srunk a bit...hope you make tgem a bit longer, add more to them, remeber, quality over quantity, acctually you can take that both ways can't you? Just don't rush too much ( that doesn'tt mean wait for three months though) , but otherwise, keep on trucking through and never give up!

its great!

hope you don't stop!

It could be better.