i hate onumi kissing ichigow full stop i love rukia so i carnt read it has i truely hate unomi

I don't expect you to have perfect grammar, however, I would appreciate it if you went through it a little; fixed a few of the mistakes made.

Hey I love your work the gramnar is pretty good, only thing when you write I'll you write Il you don't have to fix it I just wanted to put my 2 cents in.

Kenpachi is a high-tier captain

Asura and akunma shit just got real

Death note for the win

Sans:ayyyyyyyy ichigo:ayyyyyyyy

you copied undertale

Canon: Crona has no gender, possibly no sex, in canon. in the english everyone just refered to them as "he/him". its actually "they/them". get it right please.

oh dear god, why . . . ? Kyoka Suigetsu/Kurosaki Ichigo pairing makes absolutely fuck all sense, damnit. there was lit. no development between their relationship, and it's therefore based on GODDAMN NOTHING. Additionally, since Ichigo takes other's Zanpakuto from them after death, it would essentially be giving him a new persona to take on each time. Furthermore, a person's Zanpakuto is a manifestation of their soul's power, and how they wield it is a representation of their personality. (please ignore all the caps and read as if in lower case)FINALLY: NOT EVERY FUCKING RELATIONSHIP BETWEEN TWO PEOPLE OF THE OPPOSITE SEX MUST END IN A ROMANTIC OR SEXUAL RELATION SHIP, AND DOING IT BECAUSE "I want to," IS A WEAK FUCKING EXCUSE THAT THROWS THE MERE IDEA OF "READING THIS STORY," OUT THE FRIGGIN' WINDOW AND INTO A BLACK HOLE FROM WHICH IT WILL NEVER RETURN for a lot of the audience you could target this towards. this really makes me wonder if most men have never actually held a friendship with a woman. it convinces that society teaches men to think of women as objects to project things onto. it truly is "Beauty lies in the eye of the beholder." Sorry just think on it tho please

U S E D:
: スパクス ; lit. "sparks"
no Jigoku no Kaen: 百万の地獄の火炎 ; Million Hell's Flame
: 九一 ; lit. "nine-one"
Jigoku: 絵熱地獄 ; lit. "picture hell hell"

D:
1. a)Hibana: 火花 ; flash, sparkle, glow, ember, brand
1. b)Kirameki: 煌めき ; sparkle, glitter, twinkle, glint, glow
2. a)Enma no Ikari-En: 閻魔の怒り炎 ; (Hades/Satan/Lucifer/Underworld King)'s Anger
2. b)Enma no Mouretsu-En: 閻魔の猛烈炎 ; (Hades/Satan/Lucifer/Underworld King)'s Great Flames
3. a)Shurato: 修羅都 ; Scarlet Capital
3. b)Shuiro: 朱色 ; Vermilion

1. Is it just me, or do you keep putting random capitals in the middle of sentences?
2. Please don't put Kyuuichi in the Harem, incest is something we should not promote, even if they technically were not born as siblings (because of the Transdimensional / Time-Travel bullshit that I love), they still have the same parents, and therefore similar DNA, which can cause defaults in the 32 chromosomes.
3. A warning, romantic subplots are capable of ruining a piece of writing, be advised that when writing something like a Harem, where there are multiple partners for a single person, it can go wrong in many obvious ways, while being unnoticeable to the author.
3. a) The Center Character (CC) of the Harem is usually one of four options: a cheater (having multiple partners), a distrait (being completely unaware or uncaring towards the Harem), a hesitant (leaning towards two or three people in the Harem, but unsure of who to pursue), or a romantic (having their eyes set on one person in particular and ignoring everyone else). A problem can arise in the characterization and portrayal of the CC by having inconsistent choices or actions taken, and they can begin to become fairly Out Of Character, not just in universe, but also in AUs.
3. b) Sometimes, when two characters of the opposite sex form deep and meaningful relationships, fans take it to mean a romantic or sexual relationship, while not being what the author had in mind at all, Aka: Ships. People often forget that people of the opposite sex can be only friends while still connecting in a meaningful way. Please keep that in mind.
3. c) Sometimes, two characters of the opposite sex are wanted by the author to be in a romantic or sexual relationship, but the two characters personalities don't mesh together very well, or at all. This can result in forced interactions, or going through the motions of prepackaged romantic plots, Ex. "prince saves the princess, they fall in love and get married happily ever after," or "a rich royal/noble pines for a poor servant/commoner," etc.
Sorry for that, I just felt like it needed to be addressed. if you want to know more about #3, I recommend "Trope Talks: Romantic Subplots" on Youtube, by OverlySarcasticProductions.

For whom ever wrote this fanfic, I love the concept but your knowledge on the subject of elements in the bleach universe is not as broad as it needs to be.

Your story sucks the writing gets progressively worse you put in a dumbass self insert and you have a massively op ichigo and you are trying to make him stronger so yes your story is a piece of shit

I'm feeling like a lot is not making sense. It hasn't shown Ichigo to have known Urahara in the past yet Urahara believes Ichigo is so extremely powerful just because at some point Ichigo told him so?