A great story here.

Yeah I could see Kaiba breaking into area 51 XD

This was interesting. Rishid was autocorrected to radish.

That took a turn I wasn't expecting. Looks like everyone's going to see a Shadow Game though.
Thief King would eat lavae! "They're nasty little blighters. Would try to eat me, but I'd grab them at the base of the neck, hit them on the head, and then roast them on a stick." Brownie points right there with the SGC. Shame no one really heard that comment.

Oh my god, Hathor! Bakura's about to get a front-row seat to the alien chaos of the SGC. And everyone is about to find out that the Egyptian gods weren't just the Goa'uld - they were impersonators, but what exactly were they impersonating? Lol, even the Goa'uld probably don't know about the Shadow-realm gods.
I hope Bakura is able to take advantage of the chaos and get the Millennium items (oh shit, will he be affected too?)
Can't say I'm upset about the Spirit taking out those pedos and rapists.

SO close! And yet so far!

Uh oh! The SG group has found out about Bakura and are determined /not/ to let the Ring get into his possession. I wonder how things will play out? Will Bakura manage to break out of his cell and get to the secure room with the Ring?
Lol, I knew Daniel wasn't gonna get killed. (though I thought the Spirit would possess him and walk out of the room)
I'm looking forward to more! Ishizu and Kaiba are going to be upset. Plus the SGC has discovered Yugi, whose got /no/ idea what's going on.

Oh no! Bakura was captured! At least he was delivered to the SGC instead of made to disappear inside Area-51 or the NID. Now the Millennium items (at least 6 of 7) are in the SGC as well. I wonder if the Pharaoh knew about the Stargate when he was alive, even as a legend.
Looks like the Spirit has been killing anyone to get too close. I bet that's why the Ring was separated from the others, since it was the only one to actually not act like an inanimate object.

What a start! I can't wait to see how the SG group gets involved with this cursed dig. That poor man had the misfortune of picking up the Millennium Ring, yeah poor choice of artifacts to grab.

Very nice.

Hey, Fee! This is a Macho Review Tag review; I saw it had been a long time since anyone jumped in on that. ;) Double fandom blind, by the way.

You did a good job of using your prologue to arouse your readers' interest about your story. It's a peculiar situation, an ancient temple with no artefacts to be found. Why would a temple be found without any of the normal accoutrements that go along with temple worship? There's an air of mystery about that. And then to find these legendary objects - only these legendary objects - amidst a total lack of anything else one would associate with a temple... it's very strange. I wish you would have described the carvings a little more, though. What were they of? Were they in pictures or in words? If words, was it a script/language the archaeologists or any modern person was familiar with, or could they not be read? If they could be read, what did they tell about the customs and beliefs of the people who built the temple? I feel like there are so many unexplored ideas in those carvings that might heighten the mystery of the lack of artefacts. I would love to see that explored some more.

The object whispering back to the archaeologist was so creepy, because not only does it speak, but it responds directly to what he said, and in English - not in some ancient mystical riddle or in a mysterious language. I feel like that kind of gives us the first hints of what your summary says, that the artefacts had been "sealed only a few short years before," and so the power and malice of whatever spirit this is are alive and vividly present and able to cause havoc to these new discoverers, as we see only a moment later, as he dies horrifically. The last sentence of the chapter adds to this gory horror and raises my interest even further. A quick note, though, as a fandom blind reader: Do you think you could find a way to slip in the detail about the Millennium Ring having pointers sometime before it kills him? It took me a minute to understand how a round ring could impale someone. Of course, those who aren't fandom blind would already know, I'm sure, but it's a little confusing for a fandom blind reader.

And one more thing that confused me: Was it just the older archaeologist and the young woman talking about the Millennium Items while the others were unaware? I got the impression that he had called out to all of them, but then only these two participate in the discussion, and she has to alert the others to his death, which makes me think they were alone. Do you think you could clarify that a little?

SPAG:
- "The runes of the ancient temple were stumbled on by chance by a group of archaeologists who were on their way to a dig fifteen kilometres from the location of the dig." - Did you mean "runes," as in ancient writing? I guess the carvings could be that, but I got the impression you were more going for "ruins," as in what's left of something that was destroyed. I was also a bit confused by the end of the sentence, as it makes it sound like they were on their way to a dig... that was fifteen kilometres away from said dig. I assume you meant the temple was fifteen kilometres away from the dig, though? If so, I'd probably write the sentence like this: "The ruins of the ancient temple were stumbled on by chance by a group of archaeologists, just fifteen kilometres away from the dig toward which they were headed." Something like that.
- "The group examined each carving in details, they all told their own story." - The proper idiom is "in detail" rather than "in details." This is also a run-on sentence. You could separate it with a semicolon or maybe split up the sentence into two sentences.
- "They wanted to know, what had the temples purpose been." - As written, this should be a question: "They wanted to know: What had the temple's purpose been?" Or you could say, "They wanted to know what the temple's purpose had been."
- "Had the temple even been used for the purpose it was intended." - Again, this is a question and should have a question mark.
- "The archaeologists gasped excitedly, and began moving rubble out of the way as fast as he could without damaging the find." - This sentence confused me. Who is moving the rubble? Is it the one who found the artefacts? Or are they all moving rubble as fast as THEY could?
- "The archaeologist was drawn to items." - Just a typo; I believe you meant "drawn to the items."
- "But the curse his not real. He told the young woman." - A couple typos here. First, you meant to say, "But the curse is not real." Second, you put the quotation mark after the dialogue tag rather than before.

And then one last grammar principle. Dialogue is punctuated as follows: "[Line of dialogue]," [pronoun] said. Note how the line of dialogue ends with a comma rather than a period, and the pronoun (he, she, etc.) is not capitalized. To use an example, then:

"But the curse is not real," he told the young woman.

This is how that sentence should be punctuated. And so throughout the chapter.

Anyway, this is an intriguing start to the story, and I hope to be able to tag you again so I can continue it. Keep writing! :)

ja ja .. can I broke in gouberment instalations and jet a job too?

ouu. it is really interesting..
the diferences of planets do not make diferent the use of magic.. woudl could mean that it is paralel to this universe (includin planets)
I mean,.. it is obuious.. but it is interesting to see it like this.
oh. well. I really liked this story.. it was very interesting and well wrritten. congratuilations

Very intresting end to this story. I rather like it.

I like it.

I like it.