Reviews for Love is a Constant Yet Annoying Emotion |
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Asher Lily chapter 1 . 4/29 U say u want to know what bothered me? What bothered me is that I don’t get more! This was beautifully planned out and wonderfully executed. I loved every second of reading this, good job! I love how u made Bill quirky and a little annoying yet hot and caring. It’s all so good that I wish u had made more! Congrats on the fanfic your good! |
Guest chapter 1 . 10/31/2016 That was great, but you need to look for a misspelling, you spelled Mabel wrong once |
thedogzoo chapter 1 . 10/30/2016 The last pick up line though.. X'D This was so adorable! Very well done! :D 3 |
Jade chapter 1 . 3/13/2016 that's so adorable I love it |
Guest chapter 1 . 2/14/2016 when I read this I was Sunday so I thought sexual Sunday |
Ray chapter 1 . 2/14/2016 Hey that was amazing! That was really great and I enjoyed it a lot. My one suggestion is to use phrases with the structure: _,_as_. I think you used that structure about once every two paragraphs. (I'm not a writing major or anything so I'm not sure if it's more correct than what I'm about to suggest) Try replacing some of the "as" words with since, because, or just having two simple sentences. Simple sentences are friendly. The problem is when the team up with thousands of other simple sentences to kill a writing piece. Anyway, thanks for writing this! It was worth reading. |
AiMila chapter 1 . 1/4/2016 lol, this was a nice story, it was nice, very nice |
Guest chapter 1 . 12/30/2015 It's great but you have to continu it |