| Reviews for The Bleached Phoenix |
|---|
   shazza085 chapter 1 . 7/16 this really a good, and I just read the first chapter . if u still writting other fics please update im highly intrested |
| MandiHollow chapter 8 . 11/20/2019 Oh! Como pudo terminar aquí!? Necesito más! Justo cuando ya hiban a entrenar :V |
| Uhh chapter 8 . 4/8/2019 Is this still ongoing? I enjoyed this quite a bit and would love to see more! 3 |
| KrustyKruton chapter 8 . 1/8/2019 I'm really enjoy this story and can't wait to see what you do with it! |
| Guest chapter 8 . 1/1/2019 Awww keep going it’s so good |
| Guest chapter 6 . 1/1/2019 Soooooooooo fun to read |
| Guest chapter 5 . 12/31/2018 This is so good keep up the good work! |
| LaMistikov chapter 8 . 10/26/2018 For reals, this story is awesome. For now I just want to see Ichigo put those little cheeky brats into place, please give me more. |
| Ayanna Wildfire chapter 6 . 10/26/2018 This looks like a very interesting story, however, I find it very difficult to follow as there large swaths of dialogue squished together in paragraphs. If I could make a suggestion, perhaps try a chapter where you start a new line when you have a new person speaking, and see how it reads to yourself. Then you'll see if you need to clarify something in the dialogue or in scene setting. I think it would make editing and re-reading your work easier for yourself, and it would make it easier for the reader. As it is, I'm completely lost in this story and have no idea what's going on because of the walls of text that are mostly dialogue that's not separated. |
| Mukuro234 chapter 7 . 8/30/2017 This is Awesome! |
| Luna1532 chapter 7 . 6/6/2017 This is AWSOME |
| Beg457 chapter 7 . 3/12/2017 The Story and Plotline are great. Keep up the exellent work! |
| Sachiel Angelo chapter 5 . 1/26/2017 Shiro is adorable, trying to make his king happy. |
| Sachiel Angelo chapter 4 . 1/26/2017 In my last review I mention keeping it consistent with the names, you need to be it consistent with the information too. Ichigo know and had said Molly's name in chapter 2, but he had to ask for her name in chapter 3. |
| Sachiel Angelo chapter 3 . 1/26/2017 You need to be consistent with the names. I remember seeing Dumbledore addressing Ichigo by his first name the first time. Then he switched over to "mr. kurosaki" soon after. If there is a reason for the change please indicate it in the story. Otherwise be careful of this kind of mistakes. Also you might want to work on your paragraphs a bit. It is too jumbled up. Usually when a person stop speaking you need to make a new paragraph. Not to mention if multiple people are speaking or thinking, you need to separate them into different paragraphs. It was a bit hard reading the dialogues because I couldn't tell who was speaking. However, I am enjoying the plot. |
