Good chap! Can't wait for more. And God damn is Mavis adorable! I hope you do a Natsu x Mavis fic later on, as unlikely as it is. And will you be returning to your fics anytime soon? Since it's been 2 years since your latest update? I hope you're still doing alright and that you'll be coming back soon. You make great quality stories.x3

Ja Ne~!

The way you had Natsu deal with Loke pissed me off, Natsu himself should have fucking known that Loke genuinely never meant any harm towards him or his friends and he somehow has the ability to burn Loke for real even if he goes back to the spirit world? Seems like an asspull if you ask me.

It almost seems like Natsu is annoyed by Fairy Tail now, even after he finds out about who Mavis is, he continued acting like a smug prick.

This version of Natsu that you've created here is not likable at all, I've said before that I like OOC characters that are different from their canon selves when done right but this particular Natsu is too arrogant when he has no reason to be.

A good story but I don't like how smug and condescending Natsu becomes in this story, he becomes a person that's willing to literally tear people apart JUST BECAUSE they badmouthed him and his friends, I like an OOC Natsu that's different from the Canon version as just as much as the next guy but this is just fucking irrational.

Also, I don't think Natsu would ever kill someone when they've already surrendered and was begging him for mercy, that lady in chapter 1 begged Natsu for Mercy after she had lost and you have Natsu kill her anyway? I'm sorry but this makes no sense, why was Natsu willing to let the 2 slaver guys Steve and Larry live (Even though he blinded 1 of them) but some random lady who leads a dark guild gets the death penalty? The fight was already over by that point, Natsu didn't need to shed anymore blood in order to save his friends so he pretty much killed her for nothing when he could have knocked her unconscious like he did to those slaver guys.

Next, why does Natsu pick and choose which corrupt people get to live and which don't? Ikaruga for example fought in a war and killed every ranked officer in the Cabria war.

The story is still good like I said but when I see something that I disagree with in a story or something that seems inconsistent, I can't help but call it out.

I forgot to mention regarding why Natsu and the others are hiding doesn't make a whole lot of sense, the same exact thing happened in canon where the first 2 dark guilds in the Balam Alliance fell and there noticeably WASN'T an increase in legal mages being attacked and all that shit afterwards so why is that the case here? In canon, the guild that Jellal formed Crime Sorciere made sense since they needed to hide themselves from the Magic Counsel but other dark guilds? That didn't happen at all.

You'd think after 7 straight years the number of Dark Guilds would've been largely reduced because of them and they wouldn't need to hide anymore.

I know I already commented on this before but I can't help it, Natsu takes being thin skinned to a whole nother level, he was ready to give Orga an outright violent death because he called Ikaruga a whore? The whore comment is 1 thing but he was only talking trash because Natsu's team is entirely made up of ex-dark mages, it's like what do you expect? When someone talks trash about your team like that, you beat the fuck out of them, not murder them or threaten them with it like a cowardly piece of shit.

The ironic thing here is that Orga called Ikaruga a whore and didn't suffer a single injury for it, Natsu only threatened him and that's it, he didn't actually beat him up or anything, a pussy move if you ask me.

What caused Natsu to become this fucking thin skinned and hateful in the first place? I hate that kind of shit. Aside from Natsu originally killing to save his friends in Fairy Tail, there isn't any reason to act so sadistic here.

It's not even Natsu either, some of his own guild members have that same thin skinned habit, like when Grey thought that Meredy was attacking Erza and Ultear was extremely close to killing him right then and there. It makes sense since Grey and his guild were attacked and some of them almost got killed because of Meredy and Ultear on Tenrou island. I can't help but imagine a scenario where Ultear actually does kill Grey in that moment, everybody there in Fairy Tail would rightfully be shocked and outraged but would Natsu care at all when he eventually hears about it? I get the feeling that the answer would be a staunch NO and that makes Natsu in this story a piece of shit to me.

Once again, your story and the idea you got here is good, I just feel like this Natsu was poorly executed in a manner that came off as very annoying.

A good story but I don't like how smug and condescending Natsu becomes, you've turned Natsu into a thin skinned person who's ready to literally tear someone apart JUST BECAUSE they disrespected his guild? I like an OOC character that's different from the canon version as just as much as the next person but this whole thing is just fucking irrational.

Also, why does Natsu kill that lady in chapter 1 even though she surrendered AND begged him for mercy but when Natsu shows up in that town in chapter 2 he was willing to give those 2 slaver guys Larry and Steve a chance to leave? He blinded 1 of them but they both apparently lived, he won't kill slavers in some instances when they should all technically be on his shit list but he will kill a person who's already surrendered and is begging him for mercy, Natsu at that point didn't need to kill anybody else, the battle was already won so he pretty much killed her for nothing.

Next, it pissed me off to see how arrogant Natsu was acting towards Loke, I don't care what the circumstances were, Natsu should've fucking known that Loke would NEVER try to harm him or his friends in anyway and the fact that Natsu somehow was able to burn Loke in a way that going back to the spirit world wouldn't fix seems like an asspull to me. I also didn't expect for him to be skeptical towards Mavis even after finding out who she is right there on the spot.

I like the idea you've got here but this version of Natsu isn't likable at all with his decisions and his seemingly dismissive attitude towards his former guild mates and his bad attitude is certainly something else, it's a damn turn off.

I really like your story, so if you could, start updating it

can't wait for the next chapter in this story

Yo I am back reading this story again and honestly I think you are the best writer I have found on this site. At least for fairy tail. I love all of your stories and was wondering if you ever planned on updating any of them again.

This story was really good and I was hoping to see them find out Natsu was Viridian Death, well everyone except Wendy because she knows but I think it would have been interesting to see how you would have them react.

Continue please.

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASEEEEE UPDATE

That was fucking brilliant with how you handle Orga. Just like Laxus' fight again raven tail. In that illusion. Please update your stories. I read pretty much all of them and i'm hooked.

Please update?

nice chapter just wished natsu kissed erza update soon

This was a really enjoyable read. It gave me a lot of inspiration for my own story. I look forward to future chapters. Keep up the amazing work.