Pink fist again? Wtf is up with you and fists being pink? Is this some sort of lewd undertone or some attempt at making Viserys seem less threatening? You forget, despite his lack of military prowess to back up his claims he was VERY willing to become violent. At least you somewhat wrote that in, despite your obsession with his "pink fists"

Why pink fists? Does this infantilize his behavior? Because Viserys rage has never been impotent. With the right situation he could do so much damage.

There is nothing wrong with the writing... but the structuring of the chapters needs some work. Make use of better line breaks.

I know I’m late to the party, but I love this story

Lmao. Jorah needs to get his face bitch slapped. He talks to Dany like she is lesser than him. Bitch stfu.

I hope Dany and Jon get an army soon, perhaps Edric and Sansa could be the new Ned and Ashara instead their story works out.
Either Dany,Jon and Aegon become the next conquers or Aegon pass's the throne over to Jon. Like Aemon did to his younger brother Egg and become a member of the nights watch, someone needs to protect the realm from the white walkers.

you really should put this up for adoption if you arent gonna finish it

Forgive me for saying this but I feel you've neglected Jon and Dany's love story and how they interact with each other so much so it comes across that their romance has died out. I like the sisterly moments between Sansa and Arya without the distraction of one of them having a love interest, I like their characters much better that way.

There has been such a drastic improvement in your writing style from the first few chapters to the latest one! Well done! And I'm loving the plot and the idea of 3 rulers. Very interesting.

Tywin who has 40,000 men at most couldn’t stand up to the north vale reach and Riverlands or storm lands

please update I'm in LOVE with this story please continue it I'm on the edge of my seat in the story

I love it, I can't wait for the next installment

I love your fanfic its awesome

I absolutely love this story and am eager for a new chapter

A very good and intresting story. Keep it up!
i would love to see a war between the straks/dany, the lannisters and the crown(robert)
plz make it happen