Not bad, short though.

Definitely the dialogue needs work.

Could use improvement in some areas. Let's see if it does!

Do you know that this fanfic is the worst story that I ever read. Even canon was not this bad

It’s called balance breaker

Silly premise. As if anyone would be content to become a slave to someone that they don't know and that doesn't know them...

I have to say the best i have read and beleive me i have read a lot of these fanfictions

Rereading this again.

I’m rereading this again.

Interesting chapter and plot and idea

I don’t know what is with this story. It’s so good I gotta read again.

As I'm rereading this, don't you think that fight was a bit ridiculous. I enjoyed the chapter and don't want to sound rude but in your effort to have Koneko shine, you make Issei look weak. Especially after he gained all that power. Even with Touki i doubt she could break Issei's armor.

I deeply respect every authors right to change things to suit their story but this scene didn't seem to fit at all. Koneko's fight was still cool.

I don’t understand why god even gave humans sacred gears in this series. If all the supernatural can sense whether or not a human has a sacred gear and they kill them before they get a chance to unlock it then there is no point in giving it to them in the first place.

hmm so another bit of a deviance from canon as you've got Rias going to school a bit of a distance away from home yet Kuoh academy also has a college so she wouldn't need to change schools she just wouldn't be able to still be president of the ORC due to not being a high school student anymore. Although this does bring up an interesting question about canon, what happens to the ORC when everyone has graduated will it cease to exist as a club? lol

yeah still no explanation on how he copied the boosted gear since it was obviously done differently than in canon so mind messaging me an explanation please? lol