I have to compliment you for your story. It's getting better with each chapter. :D

Excellent job on the story so far. I look forward to see what becomes of this in the future. I also really appreciate your need for being grammatically correct. I'll be sending in an OC at some point.

Excellent job so far. Really enjoy the way you write the battles. This fic kinda makes me want to create an oc for the first time in 3 or so years. Good luck with this!

Happy for an update hahaha. This chapter sorta gave us some sort of personality to a few characters, it was pretty interesting, can't wait to see more. Wow, you need 11 more OC's, that's quite a number. Anyway, if I have the time I'll submit another OC to help you out, but school's starting so i'll be pretty busy. Keep up the good work and I hope for an update soon!

Yes! New chapter! Oh, but, don't worry about it taking a while, we understand that your very busy and have a lot of work to get through, so we're appreciative anyway.
We're introduced to a whole range of new characters this chapter; Kyna the analytical hypocrite, Quincy the vain pretty boy, and Lizzy the excitable swearer! Of course, these are all just face value personalities at the moment, so I look forward to seeing how they develop.
The battles were paced very well and gave us enough time to have some action and allow us to get a glimpse at each character's personality, placing them in the spotlight for a short time, which I like, and is very appreciative.
Well done to you, DJTiki and Legacy918 for your excellent OC's, I look forward to discovering more about them! Also, I hope you can read this review, there's been trouble with being unable to access new reviews lately...or is that just with me? Anyway, I'll still wait patiently for the next chapter!

Awesome opening, and glad to find a SYOC story. So hard to find good ones. Keep up the great work.

A nice start to a potentially interesting story. Hopefully things go well for you in school. I can't say it gets a whole lot different in college, but you definitely notice a change in the workload. If you can get your schedule pretty clear, you find it pretty easy to write chapters.

First off, I think this is a very well written story, and one I really do like to read, especially since this has a larger focus on action as opposed to most pokemon stories that build up to a battle towards the end of the chapter. So, having one that focuses on different, simultaneous battles is a good way to introduce characters in a type of story that does focus on the idea of a giant tournament. I do like a lot of these pokemon choices since they try to deviate from the normal choices, and the characters seem to match with their choices or are delightfully different.

So, for characters we have Kyna with her current pokemon Xatu. I figure she's going to be the primarily intellectual one, especially given she was willing to go into that full blown explanation. Then we have Quincy with his Blaziken battling against the Tyranitar. So he's going to be the heartthrob, so either incredibly vain or humble to match his popularity. Either way, going to be fun to read more about him. And then Lizzie, with her pokemon Sceptile, Altaria, and Zebstrika. Interesting that you should introduce three pokemon for her as opposed to the one for the others. I think it shows she's probably more hasty with her decisions, the language use definitely evidence of that.

As for any critiques, I can't say there's many to talk about. Everyone makes small grammar mistakes, but I don't see much point in bringing them up unless they're really distraction. So, just keep a watchful eye for things like that, and like last time, just try to be careful of redundant sentences. And like I said before, good luck with school, and I await the next chapter.

Thanks for the read, and until we meet again, ja na.

Awesome chapter and also awesome fight scenes, we got to see unique battle with unique character and there personalities from cold trainers, flirty trainer and a trainer with a unique set of vocabulary. Im really interested to see the other characters who will partake in the tournament. Also no need to apologize its all understandable with slow updates i remember my last year of highschool mam was it stressful with searching for scholarships and finding the right college.

Hm, great chapter, very intense battles. My OC hasn't made an appearance yet, but i realize this is the first update so i shouldn't complain too much

So we see some of the competitors in this tournament of legend... As well as a sneak preview of the battleground. Very mysterious and intriguing I must say. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Hm.. Carons Wildsmith? Interesting character. I can tell that the Immortal Clash is going to be absolutely insane, and I'm really looking forward to it. It looks extremely interesting, ad I can't wait to see all the OC's take part in this fic! (Also, can I just say how much I love Infernape's nickname? Because that's an epic one xD)

Can't wait for the next chapter! Keep it up!

This is quite an interesting first chapter and honestly i like it. Also quite an interesting concept of future participant's to be able to enter the tournament you have to solve a clue and face of another participant in a battle to be able to move on, well that's what i got anyways great chapter.

I love how smoothly you write :3
Great prologue, you gave us a nice taste of the story in few words, it really captured my attention.

Well, regardless of where it is, I still like this story and it's concept.

Continuing from your PM, yes, I am probably going to resubmit my character if you'll have him, but for now, let's talk about what you have here. Honestly, I can't remember if this was how the original story went, but I rarely ever judge an adopted story by its predecessor, I like to look at things as they are. And for what it's worth, I like the writing style. I think a lot of authors feel they have to keep a straight face kind of narration when they write in third person, but I like to think an omniscient narrator can be humorous at times, and that shows in some of the lines here, so kudos.

With regards to Carson as a character, she's probably the only version of this character I like. Anyone who knows me knows I have a tendency to dish on characters that are too energetic or bursting with life if they're idiots, and the great part about stories like this that has a general focus on a tournament setting is that your character has to have some knowledge overall. Carson obviously has battle prowess and that's probably the thing you want to make sure they have for this kind of story, otherwise it really strains our suspension of disbelief as to how they could be in this situation.

For critiques, I'd say there's some redundant language used in the battle specifically. For example, there shouldn't be a need for explaining that Drapion's Pin Missile missed because Infernape was underground since we already knew that. Little stuff like that really only makes reading it in your head a little awkward, and it's not that big of a deal. And with that, I'm going to see what changes you made to the original form and where I may need to tweak some things. Sorry about the lateness, I had classes.

I'm new to the Pokémon fandom and this is one of the first fanfictions for it that I've read! You write very well and you're very descriptive, I thank you for that.