Badly written, almost in a ham-fisted style. No build up, no support for what happens. Bullshit occurring just because it occurs. ODTAW and Deus ex Machina plotting.

Bad story.

Hey there, I'm here to disagree. Don't give up writing. I figure you do it because you enjoy it. We enjoy reading it. There are more readers to come, readers that peraps find your story today, or a month from now and start themselves. I'd say keep going at your own pace, doing what you like, not holding to any timetable at all.

I am wondering why you would omit the Harmony Affinity if you are doing all the affinities and what happened to the Purist faction you should have all 3 rather than the Supremacy

Well... this is a mess.

Too late I suppose, but for other fics to fuse in, I'd have suggested XCOM 2, X2 War of the Chosen and the original UFOdefense XCOM series. Falling sky and civilization make your timeline feel...really strained.
Though spreading the Zujudari war to the rest of the world does that too, I suppose. The Portal would have had to be somewhere other than the Hoover Dam for that to be reasonable.

Plasma can still go through KINETIC shields

Well nice chapter

Hey, don't beat your self up about it, sometimes things don't turn out how we want it to, but that doesn't mean your a failure, it just means that you just need some time to yourself before you choose what you want to do next for yourself. Take care and thank you for all that you have done.

Don't put yourself down a chara, you've done the best you could under the circumstances you've been given, best of luck in the future

May the gods of writing smile upon one day to make your masterpiece one day.

Okay. I've read up to the current chapter. It's pretty cool for the most part. But similarly to my earlier review, some of the conversations seem really out of place. The interactions between the two conflicting parties. Like when the alliance was negotiating with the council and they go out of their way to point out how they are more powerful in various ways and such. I know that it was sort of their intention as one of the main characters pointed out, but again, it just seemed so out of place to me.

That's really the only problem that sticks out to me.

Everything was going good. It seemed(and still does for the most part) seem cool. But the Turian assault on the Alliance ships were seriously making me cringe. Like he is just doing everything in his power to kill random aliens passing into the relay.

I know the Turians in the first contact war fire first on Alliance ships, but I highly doubt they sounded like this. I imagine more of a conversation between them debating on whether or not this new species should be fired upon. But here, Septus just tells everyone to shut up and fire. It seems like his dialogue is here purely to set up a villain.

I'll keep reading because I like everything else about the story so far(I like the idea of an alliance of races coming into conflict with another(The Citadel Council)). But I do have my concerns due to the above and its apparent blatant writing to create a villain.

BAH! I got through the first part of this chapter and had to stop. I don't like where you're going with this already - let me guess Reapers are rogue ethereals or some other drivel. Not my cup of tea good sir, not at all.

Holycrapballs man, enough with the gigantic Author's notes! More story less extra crap

good chapter bit curious to see what is the objective of the mission!

Many error on story