Beautiful plot saying that every type of love isn't romantic. I personally love this concept

I have to admit, if Katherine wasn't a part of this story at all, I would like it so much more. WAY too much time spent on Katherine and Deanna's weird not romance but yes romance relationship. I don't see any actual chemistry with Edward at all. I don't see the point of focusing so much on Katherine when it's Edward and Deanna's story, and I'm tired of her being involved at all. Now Katherine is a vampire, which is just so freaking unlikely and annoying, since now she'll stick around instead of fading into Deanna's pre-Forks life. Ugh.

I found and went through the entire story today. I hope that you eventually decide to come back to this story. It’s an interesting concept that I am hoping you continue so that I can see what happens next. I loved the chapters that I was able to read and wonder how the inclusion of Bella is going to change things.

Hmm. Curious.

I hope u will continue this story! It is unique and well done. Please don’t abandon it!

2 years later and I’ll wait for another two this is really good!

please update...

I'm only on the third chapter but I'm sensing a very (VERY) awesome pattern comeing on...
family issues
awesome jackets
a chevy (even if it's not an impalla)
PIE!
and a codependesy on a(n almost) sister
Not to mention the name!
Could it be?! DEAN WINCHESTER?!
*Dies happy even if it's not true let me live in my delusions...*

Oh I cried!

10/10 best Twilight fanfic I’ve ever read

Your writing is extremely rich and wonderful to read.

This book is great, when are you going to update?

This is so interesting! I am loving it so much, and I really hope you do plan on continuing it and haven't abandoned it! This is a great story - and I could honestly see it as an original novel if you changed the characters names and such. At least, this general plot idea could be an excellent original story! I am really loving Deanna and Katherine's relationship, and it sucks what happened to Katherine. Though, Katie probably didn't realize what she was getting herself into. She was probably just thinking about Deanna at the time. I am curious about her background though and what she is. :)

Your story is UNIQUE! I love it! Deanna is one of the best OC in Twilight Fanfiction, I liked how she clashed with Edward at the beginning, her strong friendship with Rosalie, while the poor Alice tries so hard to be her friend, thing is complicated due to bitting Katherine...btw I have to admit, I was disappointed that Katie became a Vampire because I was wishing that after Jacob phases to a Wolf, he imprints on her...but I forgot that Katie is gay.. Katherine aside...I always found Bella boring...and when she appeared in this story, I thought that it will be a love triangle of Deanna/Edward/Bella, I was a bit worried, because I ship Edward with Deanna, fortunately Edward doesn't care for Bella as he has eyes only for Deanna. Btw, who is the psycho that wants Deanna? What's going to happen next? Please update soon! I can't wait to read your next chapter!

Your writing (specifically the way you describe feelings and sensory perceptions) is beautiful. However, I do have a couple of concerns:

1. Do her problems really have to feel so full of teenage angst just because this is an Edward/OC? In trying to make your main character "feel different" you've only given her a personality that seems to be a cross between a tumblr feed and the "special snowflake mantra" that every individual believes nowadays and uses to excuse their lack of social grace and rudeness. School is full of shallow people, parents don't understand you, girls are too materialistic...we get it, we get it.

2. Although you excel in describing feeling and thoughts, you're not nearly as good at writing events in the plot. The main reason for this is probably because of your general writing style. Emotions are best described through fancy words, imagery, and adjectives but events in the story itself have to be clear enough for the reader to understand what's actually going on. Your description and writing of pure events that happen in this story is far too overpowered and concealed by your descriptive writing style. This was particularly apparent in this last chapter in which Katherine was TURNED INTO A FREAKING VAMPIRE OMG but totally proceeded without any extra emotion, surprise, or hubbub in the story. ALSO BTW, VAMPIRES EXIST. That should be a tremendous climactic moment in your story and you totally just made it sound like it was a perfectly normal part of her life!

3. In addition to not having clearly explained plot, I also have concerns about whether or not there is actually ENOUGH PLOT. If this a romance between Edward/OC and not a strange threesome between her, her best friend and Jasper (who I swear has been mentioned more than Edward by this point), have them interact more please! There seems to be no reason why they even have the beginning of a relationship at this point and it's already the 8th chapter!

You can either take these opinions and consider them or not-I really don't care. Please don't bother sending me trashy hate mail though, it's sad and rather pathetic when authors who can't take any constructive criticism do that.

- CharitinaX