cbb

It’s hard to place naruto’s behaviour, it feels off. Establishing a background for him on this world would help. Like when he arrived and how he knows what he does.

Also why would he join the straw hats? It would make sense if he just arrived and in the middle of the nowhere like an island or something.

good chapter.
so next chapter will involve Oars.

That was a great chapter, and I'm looking forward to seeing how the next one goes

Epic chapter keep it up!

awesome job on this chapter and glad Nami was there for the story this time

espero el proximo

Cool chapter continue please.

ok this is stupid why the fuck is he just telling them everything about himself.

The G-8 base arc is probably one of the few filler arcs I think should have been cannon, but that’s just my opinion. It showed some of the good marines and how they’re not all either like Akainu and his lapdogs or sheep who do as they’re told as the generic enemies of the S.H.C.

I know I’m super late to say this and that my opinion hardly matter but I’ve always felt like Naruto’s a one woman kind of guy, and my personal preference in this case would be Robin. On a different note considering this Naruto has trained in other elements besides Wind it’d be perfectly acceptable to assume he’s a master of his primary affinity. So... wind lightning, if he simply coats himself in a layer of wind chakra he should be able to nullify any of Enel’s energy attacks that he throws around. Unless Enel makes physical contact he shouldn’t be able to hurt Naruto and even then, the wind chakra coating would shred his hands or whatever he tried to hit him with. I can’t wait to see it so I’m off to the next chapter.

Dude, I like what you got here. Good writing, nice stuff, but there is one mega problem. It’s predictable. Honestly, yes, add new opponents that are strong for Naruto to fight, or stop focusing on the action completely. I mean, focus on Naruto’s relationships and change the fight scenes to a couple sentences. The fights so far have been boring, none of them have gone differently from canon. Either de-power Naruto down to just before the training trip, have Luffy sit out a few fights, or add new opponents that are stronger. I mean, the problem is that Luffy as captain should fight the strongest people...but Naruto is already on the Yonko level. The only fights that will be good with him is against Admirals and Yonkos, and Luffy keeps taking the strongest opponents. I was sooooo frustrated during the Alabasta and Skypiea arcs when Naruto would land one punch on the big guy, they’d look at him surprised and scared, and then Naruto just steps back and lets Luffy deal with it. It makes Naruto feel like a referee, and honestly makes all of the fights more boring. You get this sense that Naruto can just step in the moment anything gets dicey, and it takes away all of the suspense.

Add new opponents, make Naruto split off to make his own crew, or completely ignore the action and focus on the personal relationships. Otherwise, this entire story will be able to be summed up by saying, “it all went exactly as it did in canon...plus Naruto.”

Also, please do not let this be one of those stories where Naruto dates a bunch of women, and then just sends clones to deal with them. Like, the idea of Narutos clones banging women just seems wrong. It is also insulting to the girls, like hey I’m busy, here’s a shadow clone. If he can’t handle a harem without having to use clones to give them sufficient attention, he shouldn’t have a harem.

Otherwise, good story! Looking forward to the next chapter!

i feel like you take up too much time describing how characters look. i honestly don't care how they dressed or how they look. the descriptions are far too detailed.

fyi wind chakra is white not green. normal chakra is blue, medical is green, biju is red orange, lightning is bluish white, & wind is just white. i don't know where people get the idea it's blueish green i've never seen chakra like that in the anime.

but ... Naruto does have a bounty. you gave him one two chapters ago. Elemental sage bounty with the rassengan...

why does he not know that little detail?