I love this! It's an excellent rewrite of a potentially-good-but-ultimately-failed scene. The Padme we know would never have let something so serious be dropped. I love how vulnerable Anakin is, discussing how the sacrifices their forbidden marriage has taken a toll on him, and his own sins. Painfully beautifully written :')

Very good! Oh, if only it had gone that way...Thanks for this glimpse of the shatter-point toward a better galaxy!
VDMA,
Sophia the Scribe

I actually just found your story.. And I thought it's just absolutely Amazing! The way events happened in the movie ROTS, I guess had to happen in order for the storyline to continue or for George to have something to do. But your version would have avoided all the tragedy and made Anakin and Padme's marriage work out and they would have had their family. So thank you for writing such a beautiful scene between my favorite couple in the Galaxy Far Far Away... :D

This is good. Youve done something that I wish that happened in the movies and rea

I know I have already reviewed this story, but I've had a thought regarding the original scene in ROTS. I think it would have been clearer if the deleted subplot about the start of the Rebel Alliance had been kept in the movie. It seems that this scene was supposed to take place soon after the deleted scene "A Stirring in the Senate", where Padmé and the other Senators agreed to tell no one about their secret plans (she is wearing the same outfit and headdress in both scenes). So I guess she didn't press Anakin for answers because she was also keeping something from him and was feeling guilty.

Sorry for the rant, but I just want to put it out there. Of course it doesn't take anything away from your story.

Lovely. I really like how Padme decides that she is going to confront Anakin and slowly brings him around. The way he slowly softens and opens is perfect. My absolute favorite bit is the part where Anakin describes what marriage really is - not just the stolen moments of romance they have, but sharing everything they can - all the mundane things. So perfect. Your fic really leaves me hoping quite expectantly that that is what would happen. I believe that this is the turn-around for everything. Thanks so much.

I really hope you continue this. I love your rewrite of the scene and would love to see more of the fall out.

I agree that this scene in ROTS was a lost opportunity for them to be honest with each other, as Padmé asked earlier. I like how you wrote their conversation here, with all the things that had been left unsaid between them finally coming to light.

This is beautiful. If only Anakin and Padme have talk to each other...

I love this. Padmé is such a strong character, and she doesn't compromise her principles for others and she goes after what she thinks is right with everything she has. And I love this version, with her putting her foot down and having this conversation instead of trying to get him to live in denial with her. This story is beautiful, and I really wish it had happened this way. Someone needed to break through to Ani, shock him out of his funk, and this story beautifully highlights everything I love about Padmé's character. Thank you.

I really enjoyed reading this. In a way I feel like it fits better than what happened in the movie, because Padme is a really strong character and if that carried over to her relationship with Anakin their terrible fate might have been avoided.
Side note though... When I read the line "His hand feels sweaty." all I could think was "Knees weak, arms are heavy... There's vomit on his sweater already, mom's spaghetti".

How perfectly wonderful. You captured the essence of both of them and their relationship in an utterly new way and I enjoyed reading every word of it. Thank you so much for sharing it

I like it! You gave them depth and brought back the personality Padme was lacking in episode 3. I agree with you that this was a lost opportunity and I really liked your version, you should continue it.
Now I'm gonna check out your profile for more stories about Anakin and Padme :)

i loved it! you portrayed them very accurately! I think you write very well.

I call your writing the 'hit the nail on the head' style. by which i mean your writing style is beautifully simplistic, its concise, gets straight to the point (best kind of writing in my opinion-i don't like too much flowery description-I think it takes away from the characters), and yet it still contains a good level of description.

I think it was very clever how you wrote in a third person limited perspective but kept it written in a present tense, it gives the sense that the reader is there, and makes a refreshing change. I really feel as if you let the characters actions and feelings speak for themselves and it works well.

thank you for sharing this fanfiction on the site. i can't wait to see what you write next.

p.s. thank you for giving Anakin the intervention that he so desperately needed.

This just prove ROTS should never have happened or at least it should have happened differently.
Maybe George Lucas should have kept the draft where Darth Vader was an android created by Anakin Skywalker... I wonder how that story would have played out lol...

Anyway, you so wrote their romance just right. I just felt the love. It went from hot and fiery and close to burning destroying blowing up to simmering down to lukewarm. It was great. You capture Anakin's love for Padme and his fear of losing her as well as the fact that he feels close to being a monster, his guilt, and that he's kind of brainwashed by the maybe future Emperor (though I don't see that happening now) without even realizing it and now he's confronted and realized. Actually he's confronted a lot in this, but it's just the surface. He's got a lot to work on, but at least he's realized or acknowledged it whereas in the movie he may have been aware but he refused to acknowledged he needed help. If Padme or Obi-Wan, or force forbid Yoda, though we know he won't, talked to him things may have been different. As it was, it seemed more like Palpatine was much better at picking Anakin's emotions and knowing when to talk to him the the others did.

In movie!Padme's defense, I don't think she knew how to deal with Anakin... despite being a politician, maybe she wasn't used to being confrontation or maybe she didn't know how a marriage was supposed to be and thought it was supposed to be lovey dovey happy sappy. Or maybe it was the hormones, who knows. She was probably not thinking straight that day and was feeling overwhelmed unfortanately for Anakin. I mean she's the one who was pregnant and supposed to be dealing with mood swings (well I hear pregnant women deal with mood swings I don't know if it applies to all) so she probably didn't have the time or was capable in dealing with her husbands. Woman was overwhelmed as it was just dealing with the fact that the Republic was collapsing inside out and democracy was dying, she probably didn't want to even think that her husband was going down the same path. In her mind, I'm sure she thought that Anakin was infallible and that whatever he was dealing with, he'd always find a way to come back to her or something. But I like how in this fic, the Tusken Raiders are mentioned, like an unspoken topic waiting to break out, which leads to Anakin admiting his demons. This was wonderful. I prefer it to delusional Padme either decided to erase the incident in her mind, or decide to ignore it for the sake of her husband. May have been a one-time thing she thought for him... I don't know.