Aww. I love this so much. Can you please please make this into a story. It has so much potential. I wish there were more stories like this.
Love Marie.

Love it. Can you make more of this?
God it was hot.

That was an awe inspiring piece of writing, my dear! Love it.

~Spudz

Wonderfully written and so so delicious! Love how dark this is, and the twist in the ending is hilarious. This one rocks!

I love this.

Love it! ;-)

WOW that was HOTTTT

Very good and I really like the way you write the lemon. You take the whole story but it really keeps me waiting for it to ;;

Very good

Excellent pov, characters, well written.

loved it. just loved it.

I didn’t read this, or any of the contest entries tbh. But I did vote for it. Three times…. Don’t ask. It’s me being childish and immature and I’m proud of it dammit

I have to say I love that Edward (right?) sees a difference in Jasper’s (right?) thoughts. Idk, it feels special…

It takes a certain talent to make violence erotic. My hat’s off to you, ma’am.

Boyflirting *dreamy sigh*

Jasper’s cheating by using his power to drop the girl. Wanting to share a meal is clearly foreplay for vamps too

“curiosity killed the cat but satisfaction brought it back” Ihave heard the first part millions of times but I didn’t know it ended like that. Hmmm… that changes things

Those flashes…. Hot

I kinda like the way Jasper calls him ‘Boy’. Feels very Master-ish. Methinks Jasper belongs in the BDSM community
Ok, it could be because Edward is and looks younger, but what’s the fun in that?

Yussss. Possessive Jasper is possessive

Lolololol sorry but prick…. I always picture a pin needle or whatever they’re called. Lolllll love it tho

Have Jasper figured out Edward’s power? Or is it instinct that makes him picture everything? Instinct and a vivid imagination?
And did he use his power on Edward to take away the pain from the penetration. It tends to hurt the first time no matter the preparations.

Ok, so he suspected more than knew… But still.

Honestly… I feel your version of the diner meeting more believable than what S.M tried to sell us

Perfection! Truly.
I loved it. You should think about making this into an MC.

Excellent, steamy contest entry! I really enjoyed this one.

Love it. Love see Jasper from Edward's POV and hearing his desire at not only the Major's current actions but his memories also. A feral but controlled Jasper is HOT!

well done. this was fantastic. dark and romantic...even hopeful.

I absolutely love this. I love that you let Jasper be Jasper..The Major. he's fierce and sexy and dangerous. While I rarely enjoy canon Edward, I do like him as a perfect counterpoint to Jasper. Its easy to see why Jasper would want someone as unspoiled as Edward. They compliment each other beautifully.