Buena pelea.
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Good fight.

Pobre Shinji, su padre es un cretino.
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Poor Shinji, his father is a jerk.

Good two chapters

Yes finally it's back on! But still I wouldn't see why they would imprison a person who can fight. Keep up the work.

Besides some grammer errors that appear then and there, this is a well written story and a well-paced one in fact. I just hope you don't stick too rigidly to the anime and try to change things up a little. You have a good thing going here.

I can't wait to see what happens next.

"Damn! If we don't stop it soon all of Second Branch will blow!" Emily is racking her brain, trying to figure this problem out. With that sentence incomplete, NERV Second Branch ceased to exist.

Fixed it. There's some mistakes here and there, but none that really stands out.

"With that said. Gain curls up into a ball on the seat in the Entry Plug feeling alone and silently weeping."
I think it should be: "With that said, Gavin curls up into a ball on the seat in the Entry Plug, feeling alone and silently weeping."

"Little did he know that the panicked shouts of concern would be the last he would ever hear from his colleagues again." Hopefully that's better.

Just a Quick Update, I will be continuing this story, Chapter 2 is almost done. I'll try and increase the speed of updating but I do lead a busy life. My current schedule is a chapter every 2/3 weeks this can vary depending on hoe big the chapter is and what is happening in my life. Thanks for your patiences.

You're a little too quick on "the mother being dead" point. I believe you could have eased more into that plot point, instead of adding it so early in the story, it doesn't look particularly subtle. its ends up looking like a quick way into getting the reader to sympathize with the protagonist, as that's often used in a large majority of OC stories. Other than that, you seem to have gotten off on the right track. I'll look forward into reading what happens next. There's not that many good Eva OC stories out there.

Note: Instead of "Gavin suddenly found his feet interesting" I think "Gavin suddenly found his feet to be very interesting.", would work a little better.

Good story. Keep up the good work

You should continue writing this man. I believe in you.

Please update this story!

I hope you continue this. This story has a lot of potential.