Great story. Thanks!

I absolutely love the idea behind this story but it's got a major jump in the middle of the second chapter and then from the second to the third chapter that makes it very hard to follow

That was the absolute best short story fanfic I've read in quite a while. I loved the touches of references to Hellsing abridged

Biigoh shoutout. I see you there :)

Honestly, the bit with Jack and Bonesaw waiting to cross the street fit rether well with their personalities. Jack Slash is typically polite, but he is a polite psychopath. Pretty much fits what I know of him anyways.

pretty decent

Huh. I'm just curious. What kind of programs do you write that take that long to compile? I've made 64 bit rpgs that take literally 2 seconds to compile. Now I'm worried that all my code is garbage and undeserving of humanity. Either that or you're using Visual Basic.

Secondly, I have read/watched neither Worm nor Hellsing, but wow this story was good. Dang. Really well written. I honestly think you nailed Dinah's voice, but honestly less of Sophia's voice. I get that you were trying to make Sophia a jackass who also happens to be queen bee, but I don't think anyone actually thinks that way. I don't know though. I don't even know if Sophia is an OC or a character from the anime(s). If she was meant to be like that, well, you did well.

Thirdly, why do I never understand any of your inside jokes. Like, at the author's note, you're always like "loose cannon" or something and "did you get the loose reference?" and I'm sitting here like, could you repeat that again thank you very much. I'm kinda sad.

Lastly, I think a problem is too many characters without enough intro. I don't know. Maybe that just comes from me skimming too much, but I feel like in general you have that problem. In your Armory story as well, I was overall confused as to what was happening. I had to reread a couple of times before I knew who was who. It wasn't terribly bad in this story, but yeah. Short stories usually you want to stick with minimal characters. Long ones like Nightblade? Hell yeah 30 characters no problem. But short stories are completely different.

SpecificProtagonist edited their part in the forum to say 'Oopsie! Red, not read!' when the original post said red. I'm assuming the story is supposed to have it say read before their editing post.

This was quite fun to read, and just in time for Halloween this year! Sorry I haven't been by in a while, I've been immensely busy. I'll have to catch up on Nightblade and Shared Strength once I have more free time.

I didn't expect to see a Worm fic from you, but it was quite an entertaining read. A relatively short alt-power it may be, but it displayed the major deviations that a power like this could cause. I haven't seen Hellsing, so I don't know the specifics of Alucard's powers. Could Taylor potentially escape from the Birdcage in this story?

Also, you're right, Worm does have a lot of characters to keep track of. The multiple points of view were nice to read as well, and I enjoyed the different perspectives of each character. Taylor's third-person viewpoint didn't really make her feel inhuman, but it was a nice shift in perspective just like the other viewpoints.

This was quite enjoyable, and I'll catch up on your works soon!

Hang on a minute... if I may ask, where did you get the PHO username 'Alicornication'? Because that's one of my other usernames... odd.

this is good. tho i think you could have spent a bit more time on danny and taylor, and taylor's struggle with her inner monster. tho what you did do gave the story a.. a wider perspective?

I was hoping you were going to make Dinah become her version of PoliceGirl. I had a giggle or two in this, thanks for writing.

Someone is a fan of Hellsing abrided.

Dresden reference for the win!

Sophia voice is quite wrong. And why on Earth Bet would she try to warn some weaklings from trying to pick on another predator? They will try, she will kill them - and good riddance! :)) Remember, Sophia wholly buys into the "social darwinism" pitch. Action scene is also weakish.