hinata hissing at her idiot boyfriend naruto just hurry up and fuck my pussy with your penis already

I love how you write lemons I really liked this story~

NaruHina Skinny Dipping Hot

Great chapter. Loved how naruto and hinata were portrayed. Also loved the lemon. It was pretty well done. Can't wait to read more

This wasn't just smut; this was excellent, well-written smut with a reasonable amount of humour and foreshadowing mixed in and I think it's absolutely awesome!

...having said that, a few things that I sort of take issue with not because they're necessarily wrong, but I guess they're kind if pet peeves a little bit.

For one, why do people having sex in fics scream as loud as they possibly can? It sure as heck doesn't happen in real life, or parents would give their children nightmares with their nocturnal activities and that neighbour who nods at you when you cross paths to fetch the mail would start giving you funny looks on certain days of the week. It's just silly. Also, if you were having sex with someone for the first time and they started screaming their heads off, wouldn't that make you stop and say "oh no you must be in pain!" or something.

Also, there was no mention of any kind of contraception, which worries and irks me. You had this pretty realistic, cute/earnest/awkward first timey feel to your fic which I really liked, so it kind of disappointed me that they didn't talk about something as real as "oh crap are you pregnant now?" "nah, I'm on the contraceptive pill and/or know some prophylactic jutsu and/or I have an emergency morning after pill in my pack"

And since I'm having a whinge, what kind of magic vagina does Hinata have that she can have an orgasm the first time she ever has sex, when apparently Naruto hurt her so much that she shrieked in pain, and when he could barely last long enough to withstand a bit of handy/bitey earlier? Also though, first time sex doesn't tend to hurt all that much, especially if you're really turned on & there's been lots of foreplay & the lady has already done some - yknow - exploration.

Also, this question isn't actually for me, but my friend was wondering if it was possible for more detail on the position they were in, like was he standing and holding her up or were the both kind of standing which would probably require Naruto to go into a pretty serious squat/horse-riding stance since he got pretty darn tall compared to Hinata during time skip... my friend wanted to know...

Thanks for the great story!

It's "sank to her knees" instead of "sank through her knees". You made that mistake a couple of times in the story.

I'm fucking dead. i thought it was gonna be one of those ones where they are completely clueless but no. omg i freaking died

I love this fanfic and you should make more chapters if fanfic.

I think you have a good grasp of these two and one of the possible ways a relationship could have started between them earlier on in their lives. Do you have any interest in doing something longer? I see that you have done numerous DBZ fics so I will be checking those out too.

Love love love your story :)

Hot but Hinata hadn't said she loved Naruto and vice versa.

That was some damn good fluffy smut. You have a gift my friend.

Oh wow, been what, three years?

And the best couple lemon yay

As much as I love them, would have liked to see more of why Naruto suddenly liked her, maybe have him say something about talking with Jiraiya helped him realize she likes him and gave him more to think about the rest of the trip but yeah. Still hot