You are a legend for this writing

Wow. Just... Wow. Really good. I'd honestly like to see a follow up with the events of the spring break at jaune's house.

awwwwwww

Very good...that's I'll I have to say because this is great one of best I've seen in a while.

It could've been worst, zwei could've taken pyrrha's bikini top and they would've chase him.
Love the story.

This, was excellent, a smidgeon hard to follow at times, but excellent, well done and... well i guess it felt natural.

Nice feeling

There MUST be a squeal!

Hey. Sorry it took so long to make my review, I had a lot of things to do.

Excellent story. I had a lot of fun reading it. The humour was great and I liked how you inserted some special comments of the story's action. It had a nice feeling. It's one of my favorite for of humour in stories. The characters were well described and we could really see them acting that way. From Yang's teasing and party attitude, to Ren's controlled personality and Nora's Madness. All of them felt real and canon. And of course, we cannot forget Pyrrha's embarrassement. You were right, She does blush a lot in this story. Still, I think it's something that would happen in the show, considering how Pyrrha clearly doesn't have a lot of romantic experiences. Still, she was determined, even though she was embarrassed. It fit her. nd Jaune was his usual adorkable self, though a bit more aware of his and Pyrrha's feeling. It does make sense, considering what happened at the dance. It feels natural. And of course, they were cute as little puppy, all shy like that. And they confessed in a way that fit them: awkward, but full of feeling. And the build-up belt natural too. Not a sudden love at first sight, but a slow realisation of their (mostly Jaune) feelings.

I also enjoyed how you gave a spotlight to everyone. The story was great because while Pyrrha and Jaune were the driving engine, the others also got to shine in their own way and not necessarily because of the romantic plot. There are a lot of exemples, but I remember particularly the arcade demonstration of Ren and Jaune, the burping contest and the EPIC sandcastle fight between Ruby and Nora. All of this show that the story is not just a romantic story, but something much more diverse and complex. I can see how much effort you put in it and why it took 8 1/2 months to write it. There was a lot of events and thinking about them all was impressive.

All in all, excellent work. The story is funny, had sweet moments and all the characters were great. I also noticed something. I don't think the story is M-rated. The only reason it might be is when Pyrrha placed her breasts on Jaune, and even that was rather tame. Plus, there is no swearing. I have seen other stories much more steaming in the T-rated. So you could easy change the story to T-rated. More people would read it. it's just my opinion, so you don't have to do it.

Keep up the good work.
Volcaniclord

This was a fun story, and long.

I give you credit for being tenacious. But holy cow, man. 8.5 months. How do you guys do it?

I enjoyed this story immensely.

25K words in a single chapter? Now that's something I like to see in a one-shot! :D

This is amazing! You are a fantastic writer! Keep up the good work!

Wow. This was quite the work.

If I could describe this fanfic with one word, this would be: Tropes.

A lot of Tropes/Memes of Beach Fanservice Harem Romance stories are in here. A lot of people might not like the OOCness and the simplistic plot for a lot of the things that happen in this one-shot but I personally found it enjoyable enough.

Good work. Not the best you can fight but it's definitely the best "Beach Episode" story you'll find in the RWBY fandom.

Don't ever apologize for length, if anything I want more haha. I thought it was awesome, I was thoroughly entertained the whole way through. Great work on the detail and humor sections. I would love to see more from you, I know this is a one shot but I'd like to see your take on Pyrrha spending a week with Jaunes family and growing their relationship.
Thanks for your awesome work, hope you write more soon.