cant finish a story like that. a god as strong as percy going down after one punch it just doesnt work you meed to write way more chapters

Update bro. This is a quite good story. Please update. Been like 2 years. Continue this story, please.

Please write next chapter already. thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

badass

I would say put him with Bianca

please continue with this story it is unique

I love it!

Please chage to in complete this is a really good story with a nice plot you left way to many unanswere questions I want you to annswer so please UPDATE

Can you please change the status from complete to in-progress? thank you

Great Story!
Does the story end like this

Ya never mind what I wrote in the first chapter

Great work
this has great potential to become a really good fanfic
keep up the good work

Honestly, chapter 1 started out ok, but chapter 2 is just one big mess.

You need to have a better fix on Perseus' character. Now he mysterious at first, then he's childish/angry to Artemis and her hunt and then he's suddenly smiling with the rest? That just doesn't works.

When you Perseus is angry, you write in a very cliche manner with Artemis sobbing, Perseus automatically yelling in a tasteless and short way that you always see in bashing stories (bashing stories are 99 out of 100 times awfully written btw...). You also heavily contradict everything with having him be angry at Artemis and her hunt when he says the name like it's the worst thing on the planet and then he's all like 'we go way back... (good memories! *smile smile*).

The backstory is not thought out very well either. The whole 'Zeus wants to be made a primordial god' business lacks any credibility (yes, it's fanfiction, but some things still don't become credible because of that). A better angle would have been that Zeus felt threatened when he realizes his son is/would be more powerfull than him. If perseus is as powerfull as you say, Zeus could not curse him just like that. He could have been tricked however. If you have a betrayal going on, just stick to a single voting. Multiple rounds again, makes things less credible. As for the backstory, why not just say Zeus couldn't keep it in his pants as usual? Nyx is said be very beautiful. He is notorious for tricking women into bed and the result is another child, in this a god (not primordial, but one more powerfull than himself!). That is more simple and there you have it: a more solid backstory without any nonsense.

Sorry if the review is blunt, but I figured now you can still rewrite this chapter because if you continue from here, it simply can't get better. This chapter is your basis and for a good story, you need an ironclad basis. As for pairings, honestly, I would find it refreshing if you don't bother with it. Don't be like 'I must do a pairing' as if it's mandatory. Especially Zoe pairings are too cliche to even be funny anymore. Also, try to keep the whole thing with Artemis down a bit as in, don't make them best friends. Good friends, fine. Best? Again, too cliche and a Perseus connected deeply to the hunt is too overdone. If you must pair him, I suppose you can just go with Bianca (it's not uncommon to fall in love for someone who resceus you I suppose). As for Perseus' domains, just call him te god of night first and foremost. That whole loyalty and courage stuff doesn't befits a son of the night and neither does hunting (it's a poor excuse to connect him to Artemis). A god does not NEEDS a whole resume of domains. If you must, try to think of something original, just as long as it fits with his station.

Another cliche story ... perseus god of night ... hates zeus ... council banishes him ... comes out ... helps artemis even though she voted for his banishment ... tells sob story ... wins over demigods ... blah blah blah ... if he hates the council shouldn't he just make zeus children fade to make him weaker ... and NOT HELP save them

I like this history :D