This chapter is somehow even worse than the previous one. It's a long ass, super uninteresting info dump of bullshit "science" and other made up bullshit that you think sounds smart but ultimately comes off as pure wank.

The method of delivery was dumb cringe-y shit where you have Hermione low-balling questions that have no need to be asked given that the dumb bitch was attached to his hip the entire time he made all of this anyway. So it was just an info-dump for the sake of info-dumping. No one actually need to know all that shit in so much detail, especially when it's all meaningless bullshit that will probably never have any impact to the story. If you can even call any of this a "story".

Then there's the dumb shit where you broke the fourth wall which is just plain unacceptable. It wasn't cute. It wasn't funny. It just made you seem like even more of an idiot and a shit writer.

I don't know why I even bother reading this trash. It's all the same. It's all bad. I WANT a decent HP/SG-1 crossover, but they don't seem to exist.

And the "comic interlude". Jesus fucking Christ. I cannot tolerate that level of stupidity. I just don't have the patience for it anymore.

"They are unaware of any alien threats from space"

Yeah, because those two space ships you watched getting blown up were just set decoration and made of cardboard. Definitely not alien invaders or anything.

"Har"
"Mione"

It's like you want your readers to vomit.

So Harry ends up dating the first creepy, obsessive fan girl he meets and never sees how that's a bad idea.

I mean, I guess you wouldn't see it that way given how you contrived this entire situation just to get Harry to start dating Hermione, someone he would have otherwise never met. So you're obviously a Hermione fanboy. It's not worth it otherwise to contrive such a bland and uninteresting series of events.

I mean, what is it with people who write HP/SG-1 crossovers? They seem to almost all be absolutely fucking incompetent. The stories all end up essentially being super boring summaries where there's very little actual STORY to read. Harry's entire childhood? Several paragraphs where years pass. Bad, poorly-written dialogue that doesn't even have the correct punctuation. Where's the quotation marks? There's so many missing. Then you have the tournament. An entire year gone in a few paragraphs. All the tournament "tasks"? Not even mentioned. Harry is just suddenly, conveniently, incapacitated long enough for Voldemort to get reborn, then he leaves. But hey, now he's dating Hermione.

It's like some weird disease, where your brain immediately decays and you can only write bland jargon and vague summaries of events the moment you start planning a story in this crossover.

this chapter was too much of an info dump, and was rushed. too bad, the flow was good though the actual character interaction has been less and less as the story goes on.

still a great plot, though

so just as an inquiary is this story up for adoption so it can be finished or will you do it as your time allows?

Loved it and seriously wud love a sequel

This was an interesting story but was truly incomplete. I don't know if you've made another story to continue/finish this universe but if you haven't you should.

I agree with your note that all stargates have their own address. I mean the Alterans at one point basically numbered them(See SGU) so why would they suddenly change it? Doesn't seem logical to me. Loving the story so far very interesting use of the multiverse(In that you're using X-Men as well).

And there is no point 2 on your profile page that makes your AN make any sense. So...what is your point?!

There are some good ideas in this story. I think that you have tried to put too much into it without allowing for the development and interaction of plot and character. You need a word count three times more than you have to deal with all the elements you are trying to use. I am giving up reading this story simply because you are not doing justice to a story that has solid potential to be good if not great.

Do keep trying though as this is certainly a way to develop your writing skills. I am going back to try your other stories though, and I will give further feedback.

How the fuck was this the end of the story?

started well, crossing Marvel was to much, not needed and doesnt fit, at all

I'll keep reading but you did lose me a bit when you had SG-1 acting like NID thugs in the previous chapter. Particularly since Sam and Jack are both smart enough to know you gather more with sugar than shit and specifically HAVE disobeyed such orders in the history of the show.

I'll also mention that your descriptions of Harry's FTL system in operation sounds a lot more like BSG FTL jumps than Star Trek, complete down to the navigation issues it has. ;)

You lost me with all the technical stuff. I know many ppl enjoy it, but for me it is a very fast spaceship is enough. Since so far it seems more tech talk than story i give up. I might come back when i feel i can better handle it since i really enjoy hp/stargate crossovers.
Thanks for sharing

Jus it I'd say, we have room temperature superconductors, we just don't know how to mass produce them. Seriously, carbon nanotube, twisted 1.1 has a projected resistance of zero, so I've read.

wasnt the tria the ship that had survivors oboard? :/