In Chapter Four, when Jemma is talking to Dr. Garner, he mentions a hiker who was lost on My. Hood. In the two or three sentences that he uses to tell the tale, he switches the gender of the resilient hiker. Please, fix!

Sorry if I sound mean, I just know I need people to tell me when there is a mistake in my story, or else I'll never see it.

-UD

In chapter three, during the shower scene, you said in Jemma's thoughts that Maveth had low gravity, when in fact (can't remember if it was episode 3-04 or 3-04) Jemma says, in her first hours on the deathly planet, before the fear set in, that the planet had a very strong gravity pull, which probably explained why she was tired. Needs to be fixed!

Loved it! I'm not exactly sure why you modified Jemma's time on Maveth, changing Will to Jason and all that, but other than those parts I really enjoyed this. A bit melodramatic at times, but overall very well written and expressing Jemma's ptsd in a very identifiable and logical way. Really appreciated all the feels in the story; you write FitzSimmons quite well! While I would have liked a bit more subtlety, it wasn't a very glaring issue and your characterzations of everyone made up for it. Keep writing, and God bless!

The way you included Bianca was interesting. At first, I wasn't sure about it, but now I can see it fits in with the whole PTSD plot. I really like the topic, and at the end , I love the part about ignoring the stigma and it doesn't control you. You've done a marvelous job in this fanfic. :3

Yes yes, I like this very much. I like your version of Maveth a lot better than the canon version, there's no ridiculous love triangle, which makes it much better. ALSO FITZSIMMONS KISS ALWAYS A PLUS. Really, great job, Jess, way to go! :3

Yay, I just got to read this and OMIGOSH YOU'RE SO GOOD AT WRITING LIKE WHY?! You keep them in character so well and it's nice to get more Fitzsimmons perspective on the story. It's ok if you to have long update periods, it happens to everyone (I totally understand). Remember, your life isn't just about fanfiction, you also have friends and family, and school. Good luck on your finals!

This is awesome! Please update soon! :)

Great job. I'm really enjoying this. Thank you for continuing to write your ideas and you flush out the moments we "missed"'on the show.

Poor Jemma... As long as I live, I will never forgive Ward for shattering her and Fitz's innocence.

This was beautiful. I am so happy that you've gotten back into writing. Now, I can be a fan of yours, too!

keep writing! excellent stuff here!

Why do I feel like they are setting up the origin story of skye, sorry daisy, but also one for Jemma. I mean with the amount she has changed since season one, they have to be going somewhere with it.

It is a great story and you shouldn't worry about the other similar yours is the best that I have read so far

I haven't been reading fanfic lately because I've been so busy, but I had to take a look at your take on Jemma's rescue and recovery. So far, I think you've got into their heads very well. I love that you make the point about Jemma wanting to make sure Fitz is really there in the end, that it's not a hallucination. So good!

Wow , this is really good! It has a lot of potential so far, and I can't wait to see where this goes. Everything seems to be in character so far, and I don't see any glaring grammatical errors either. Nice work, and update soon!