it is the best story i have ever read.

You accidentally called ash arceus

YOU ROCK!

Aww

Nicely written

aawwwwwww myyyy godnesss.. that was sooooo kawaiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii *_*

This gave me sooo many Amourshipping feels.. oh my godddddd... *_*

I loved it.. loved it sooo much..omgggeeeeeee *_*

When Ash finally started to realize his feelings.. it was so cuteeee.. and that confession tohhhhhhh... I'm awestruck!

loveddddd it..!

I am in love with this one ,perfect also ,just to let you know the talking styles vary with all the characters ,as in you nailed everything,even made this very realistic not to mention probably my favourite yet but just try to make the conversations sound a bit more unique to each character because they each have a distinct way of speaking ,hope to see more like this one (:

ooh this just keeps spicy amourshipping good, and as a fellow amourshipper i have this to say to you, amourshipper and proud remember that dude and keep up the good serenaandashshipping work dude.

Happy new Year!( a bit late)

Nice ending! Maybe a bit too cliché but I like it. So the whole story was good and cute especially chapter 1 but the others are nice too. And I know how it feels if you lose your motivation to write but don't want to break your promise to finish the story. I'm in the same situation. Maybe you'll start writing again when Amourshipping finally becomes canon. The chances aren't high but defenitely higher than the chances of the previous Ash-shippings.

Random question: How you feel about a Snubull on Ash's team?

No chapter 5?

Hey there, just wanted to chime in and tell you I hope you continue this story.

Your writing and use of words are pretty good, and the story itself is cute, while staying mostly on character. I especially like the little introspective thoughts that are just long enough to convey feelings yet not be annoying.

One thing I think you can improve on is to describe scenes and surroundings better. I found it pretty hard to visualize the sleeping scene in chap. 1(though ultimately it didn't detract too much from the story)

Looking forward to the next chapter

Amazing work! Can't wait for the next update!

very nice work on the chapter dude keep up the good serenaandashshipping work dude.

Excellent chapter. For a first story, and possibly a new author, you have accomplished so many things and impressed me just with one, appropriate length chapter.

You seem to be specialized in many areas, in which I find very interesting.

The summary does not sound cliché, boring, or random, and it's why I decided to check out your story, and read the first chapter.

The characterizations are well done. I could say thoroughly done. I find Ash's characterization the most interesting. Near the end, I was about to assume Ash going out-of-character, but it surprised me that I found a very nice, well written, detailed character development, in which, can be hard to write.

Grammar, spelling, and flow: It's excellent from what I can see. There are a few errors, but they are minor and does not distract me.

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By the way, it was nice to make Serena fantasize about what could be underneath Ash's clothes.