BOY I sure do love having my heart ripped out and stomped all over. I can't believe I hadn't read this one!
Have I mentioned I love it when you write KAGURA because ... I LOVE IT WHEN YOU WRITE KAGURA. (I actually cried a little HAHA.)
This was so beautiful, I know I've said this before and I'll say it again but your writing really is stunning. You capture and convey so much with so few words like HOW? How are you so eloquent.
I think you captured Kaguras feelings so perfectly omg please never stop writing KAGURA.
I love this I love this I'm going to go read it again fifty times.

I really liked how you used colours to describe them and their relationship, very creative.

beautiful. agree with you on sess/kagura

I liked this it was beautiful and very poetic ...plus I'm a huge sess/kagura fan lol

I've read this earlier today and couldn't leave you a review at the time. I don't have an account here, but anyways lol
This was beautiful. I love how you use "father" instead of "Naraku" - it makes everything more real and sad, because that's the TRUTH.
Your last line was a killer.

Very deep. Angsty and emotional. I love the color reference. You chose them perfectly. And I loved this line: Sesshomaru was never blue - he is red, scarlet, all blood and death and vengeance and bitterness beneath an aristocratic shell.

Indeed a perfect description of Sesshomaru.

I have never seen anyone call Naraku a father for any of his incarnations. It made the story a bit darker too, because one could indeed call him that.

You described Kagura's feelings very well -

Loved the use of color here. It just seems to fit. I really loved the inevitability in this line: "Blue (like everything else) will come to an end."

Yep Kagura's love was unrequited. A lost cause. The most Sesshomaru felt for her was compassion or a smidgen of pity when she was dying. That's canon.
I think he would never harbor affection for anything Naraku created. And she was a sly creature who schemed and lied for her own agenda. Sesshomaru doesn't like being manipulated.

I really like this.

I have a feeling you're good at poetry. I really can't find anything to pick at or critique. It's short and to the point.

This was beautiful. All the colors resonated some deep feelings in me that were almost tangible. Loved this.

nice job! _