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Cool story can't wait for the next chapter

Great way to start the story can't wait for the next chapter.

Good chapter, keep up the good work.

C'mon man why the cliffhanger? I wanna know if logia gonna flee with kuroka in his arms or if he beats/kills his master when his guard is down. Can't wait for the next chapter ciao

Noo the bastard stopped their escape and now they are gonna be separated forever I really wanted him dead by tjis chapter. Until the New chapter.

LONGER CHAPTERS THEM I AM HAPPY
Keep your good work

can't wait for the next chapter

like it hope you continue this

This chapter was good and Sad at the same time good because even after all the pain they form a pure and beautiful friendship and possibly love between the 2 of then but now that Bastard is gonna torture little Shirone as well but Kuroka and Logia would have none of that he will pay for all the pain he caused then with his experiment and now the are gonna begin a new even if they are hunted down they are still free in their own way to live the life that was taken from then and had a family. Keep the Good Work this is very original. Until the next chapter.

P.S. Sorry that i can't help with the writing or grammar since english is not my first language i am still learning to write correctly.

Nice chapter. The only constructive thing I could think of is the length of the chapter. The rest of the chapter is good.

since kuroka is not insane will she deal with her sister differently like giving her to the gremory for protection or just abandoning her to her fate, which seeing as you've built her as a protective sister seems unlikely

I think this is pretty good, and I have read countless fanfics.

This is interesting can't wait to see their great escape and the death of the bastard of a master

Very interesting, haven't seen anything like it. Eager to see where you'll take this story.