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damn an here I thought this would be a good story but then I actually took the time to read it and you went and completely fucked things up by saying that Naruto is the Great Grandson of Madara Uchiha and has the Byakugan that's just fucking stupid. Naruto could be the great grandson of Hashirama due to Mito UZUMAKI considering his mother is a FULL BLOODED UZUMAKI. But there's no god damn way in hell I'll ever accept him as an Uchiha especially from Madara's line. This site is slowly going to hell with idiots like you writing incredibly stupid stories that make no god damn sense and then other authors completely abandoning their stories

Hope you continue this story awesome so far

That last omake was so over done that I can smell the charcoal from here. I have literally seen that same 'original' omake a few dozen times. It is also a flimsy one, since the clones always have the same personality traits as the user, meaning that the clones will want to do the paperwork just as much as the original.

The whole first person thing is a pain in the ass and detracts from the story. You jumping from POV to POV every other paragraph is also grating in the nerves and is making lots of people just shake their heads and close the tab or window. You also need to start a new paragraph when someone else speaks. It just gets confusing for SIX different people to speak in the same paragraph.

As for the rest of it... Hah, the blood clone? In order to make a proper blood clone, the user would either have to die or kill someone else to make it, automatically making it a jutsu Naruto wouldn't even bother with.

Naruto is not directly related to the Shodai Hokage, Senju Hashirama. Naruto's mother was basically a cousin, a distant one at that, to Hashirama's wife, Uzumaki Mito. The only way for Naruto to be the man's great grandson is if one of the women you listed as his lover, Tsunade, was his mother, since she is the sole surviving descendant of Hashirama. As far as anyone knows, Minato was from a no-name family with no known background. Besides, making him related to Hashirama just means Naruto will be boning a close relative in the future, if you do plan on hooking him up with Tsunade. Good job fact checking before diving face first into concrete.

As for the bloodlines, why not just give him the Rinne Sharingan, which has the powers of both the Rinnegan and Sharingan in one while coupling it with the power to teleport people into alternate dimensions? The Byakugan is basically a worthless ability, since it is so limited that it is almost laughable when Hyuga say they are the strongest. They are one of the most pathetic clans in Naruto and are so limited that its a small wonder they haven't been wiped out already, though them hiding in Konoha like frightened rats has probably helped.

You suck at coming up with genderbent names. Seriously, Kira? Kiba's name means 'Fang,' while Kira means 'Ruler,' which does not fit dog boy/girl. Why not just call her Kanna? Also, why not call Kakashi's female version Kiki, like everyone else does? You also forgot to change out Sasuke's name for the one you gave his female version when the teams were announced. You also did the same for Kakashi.

No genin is allowed to do anything without a higher rank ninja present, which automatically makes this story total bunk. At the very least, the jonin monitors the student and helps them in various situations. Naruto, who has been away since he was six years old, would need a person to guide him around since he wouldn't know where anything was or who people were. In simple terms: everyone answers to someone. Making it so Naruto had nobody to watch over him would just breed even more animosity towards him and make his life even harder. Good job packing even more hate on Naruto, and possibly getting Hiruzen fired for favoritism. (Also, S-rank is the highest rank a ninja can receive.)

Skipping the D-ranks, an... Well, I know few writers and they say that D-ranks are just for team building, so I guess Naruto not doing them is okay. Besides, they all sucked anyway. Only the Tora capturing mission was any use.

So in less than a week, which should be two months if Team 7 is taking the Wave mission, Naruto became so notorious that he's known the world over, but his actual name is unkown. Well, that makes the story that much more confusing. The whole thing about giving Naruto a sword, and even worse, calling it 'Dragon Fang' is retarded as all hell. A short blade would be better, like a ninjato or a tanto. At least you didn't give him all of Kratos' weapons and basically made him into a mini-Kratos... If you wanted to give Naruto a sword and all elements, you could have just given him the Dragon Blade, a weapon from the actual Narutoverse that allowed its wielder to harness all five elements.

The whole explaining things in the middle of a fight is stupid too. You make it sound...almost like they're chatting at a water cooler. Completely detracts from the fight and makes it feel boring. Having Naruto kill Zabuza would just make Haku hate him, to some degree.

Susanoo-no-Mikoto is a guy. At least get the whole name right, if not the gender. Also, it is YOMI, not Yami, and it is a place, not a deity. Fact checking should be your best friend.

Making Naruto basically invincible was stupid. You should have just made him incredibly skilled at evading attacks. Besides, if someone cut his head off or blew it apart, he'd probably wish he had died, since the pain would break his mind. There is no known limit to a sealing scroll, so making a 'dimension scroll' is just idiotic. Another thing is that, with the bloodline purges going on, Kiri-ninja DESTROYED BLOODLINE SCROLLS. Why keep something related to what you are trying to wipe out, especially when it will be completely and utterly worthless? Poorly thought out plot point.

As for mixing in DBZ, that is a terrible mistake. You could have had it so that, since he was with DEITIES, they could just make him peak human, which means he is the best a human being can be physically and mentally (without becoming superhuman), which would also allow him to learn all he did in a possibly shorter time frame. Also, six years in the chamber would result in Naruto being trapped in it forever. You may have made it so that he couldn't age, but spending more than two days inside the chamber would cause it to seal up. The chamber also only held enough food to last a single person two years, or one year for two people. In other words, Naruto would have starved to death.

Naruto's name is absolutely ludicrous in this fic and is a pain to look at. Just leave him as an Uzumaki, or make him adopt the Otsusuki name. Also, RIKUDO SENNIN! FACT CHECK!

Overall, very poor execution and very sloppy work all over. Reading it was almost painful, due to how badly written it is. I don't see this fic lasting more than a couple chapters before you give up on it., either from boredom, overextension or running out of ideas. Before you ask, you have overextended quite a bit already and drastically shortened this fic's possible lifespan.

are the male names of the genderbent thwir names or mask to hide from public? damn thats one large name, wouldn't ootsutuski been a better name? that's where Uzumaki, Uchiha, senju, hyuga, kayuga clans come from if not all

Well I for darn sure found it interesting I love gender-bend fanfics as far as the story seems rushed no idea what's the MC's main goal I also got confused to hell with the constant switching from FPOV to 3POV back to back but in the end I found it interesting truly and can't wait for more

interesting

Cliche much