There's no need for another chapter! That was awesome! The battle scene was with my favorite! and the fact that Seto almost died so original! I love it! And guess should be dead? Bandit Keith that's who! They have fuuuun last night on the beach; so basically,it's a Katy Perry song. What was that song called again? Oh yeah, California Gurls! Just look it up! If you check the song lyrics, you can see what happened. Just look at that one line that talks about a beach in verse 2, that's how you know what happened. Yugi , you should thank me!

Now he was turned down! He said he's just like Keith, trying to keep him locked in the city! And yet he still loves Jou enough to protect him! Seto's risking his life because he loves himm and it's not just lust! It's true love; you know, that stuff in Disney movies, that makes the main character do heroic deeds for a feeling they have for another main character that's most likely deadly? Yeah, it's that. Jou can't you see that?!

*Punch Keith in the face, break his legs, make him choke on his kneecaps, and say f*** you! Bad Keith bad! Don't hurt Joey or not only me, but Kiaba will own you a$$!* Haha! Love it though it's super sad for Joey. Kiaba got rejected! Well sorta. Joey never said he didn't like Kiaba, so I guess I guess that doesn't count. Right?

Kiaba got his heartbroken, but still try to help him now that is called love! Joey, get it through your thick skull already! Kieth sounded perverted! Ewww! Seto better win!

Pior kiaba! He is feeling heartbrokend now!:( Joey was too oblivious to see it! You hurt his feelings Joey, especially when you said you wanted to go back to your mom. You are so harsh, and I know Kiaba could so brash, but now he's going to crash! No pun intended if you get it! FYI it's the second beginning song of psycho-pass! Now you know, so I guess you think I meant to make the pun, but I didn't! Honestly, Kiaba thought he could show you everything to you and that this moment was for him. Now I made the pun. and it felt good! I won the bet, I knew it, but who knew it was bandit kieth! Nice plot twist! Clap it up for you and I'm not being sarcastic. Awesome! Can't wait to read the next chapter!

Poor joey! I threw up like that before. It was awful! How much do you want to bet that it was either "bondage over board" or "rapist incident" or even just plain "kidnap and abuse" that happened. Cant wait to read the next chapter!

He's been doing the drugs. But was forced so that doesn't count as abusing

First of all I liked it. Second, you did a decent job. Third, I think there were some glaring flaws.
Seto finding out about "the missing child" should have happened earlier. I feel like Yuugi and co. would have talked to him and he wouldn't have just conveniently read a newspaper on it right before he found Joey.
Also as a student taking health science courses your portrayal of the hospital staff's incompetence insulting. Obviously they have had training and experience with rape and kidnappings before so they would know how to handle Joey's case. Also it takes a lot of work and intelligence to graduate nursing school so the idea of an idiotic nurse is preposterous.
I feel like with the injuries Joey sustained (Jay did say he could see bone at one point) there is no way that Seto could have taken him home and adequately cared for him only hours after he was freed. Joey would still have been in the extensive care unit.
Joey's recovery was sporadic. It didn't make much logical sense.
I realize you needed a villian in this fic but Bandit Keith isn't a child torturing freak. Yeah he has some major character flaws but he's not downright evil. He also plays card games for a living so if anything he's kind of a loser.
Seto became increasingly out if character as did Joey. I understand that a drastic event changed their relationship but it would by no means alter their personality's entirely. I enjoy reading fluff as much as the next puppyshipper but that doesn't mean I want you to come up with perfectly in love and gushy characters for the sake of being cute. Joey would have crazy mental scarring and Seto is still a huge tight wad.
I love reading fan fiction but I can't stand it when its completely unrealistic. This had enough good points for me to muscle through it but it was still slightly unpleasant to read. Keep improving.

I'm usually not a fan of this pairing, but this story is so touching, and amazing it maid me cry :) good job

Please! NEXT CHAPTER! I need to see bandit Keith die! It is such a good story! It needs to end with with Keith's death!

This is so beutiful! I read the last chapter a while ago and I cannot get it out of my head. It is such a heartwarming story! It made me want to cry! Please! MORE!

Wow what an intense story,

i was hooked as soon as i

started reading the first

chapter..is there more chaps

or is that the end?

Such a sweet chapter XD

x Rin x

that was great

I'm so glad I read it!

even if it's not done!

lol

omg that's so sad!

but yay kaiba!

This story is really cool! I noticed that you haven't updated it since 03 and a it would be nice if you would updated soon. I want to see Bandit Keith get his just deserves! Oh how I wish I could stranggle him! I'd kill him my self if I could! NOBODY HURTS SETO AND JOEY AND GETS AWAY WITH IT! I AM A REALLY BIG JOEY FAN AND ANYONE WHO HURTS JOEY DESERVES TO DIE! I know seto teases him but that's just fights between friends. Anyway, This story is really cool! I love it when Seto starts beating the crap out of keith! Muah ha ha! So please start writing this story again! I'd really like to see what happens and what torture will befal keith.

Please update soon! ~_0

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