Please do continue as I am quite interested in this story plot.

Well this is a brilliant start...

How could SUGOU (not poor Suguha) capture Asuna if she (ostensibly and hopefully) was using a more secure Amusphere (which hadn't the kill-the-user option). Why did Kirito join GGO at all if not pushed by the government guy (whatever his name was), he lacking any interests in firearms? Why is Kirito defining himself a harbinger, having him never called such in canon (to my knowledge)? How more serious is Death Gun's threat compared to canon, since the body count is up to 17? Obviously things were not really as in canon, up until your Kirito entered this GGO. You should at the very least cover the differences in premises, be it into a flashback or by Kirito narrating in-story to bring us to speed.
Short chapter too... was your commentary in the first chapter there to mask its shortness? ;)
Don't take offence at my ribbing. Your story has potential and... well... like Kirito I sometimes can sound condescending when I'm really not, but that's due to the fact that English is not my birth language and I tend to suck at subtleties even in my birth tongue. :)

Very nice story, I look forward to the next chapter :)

By the way, erm, how do I put this...

FOR THE LOVE OF GOD, REMOVE THE COMMENTARY.

Thank you.

Have a nice day.

The commentary's OK, but maybe a little less. Any pairings for this fic?

Hello, I read your story and it's good, but and I'm really sorry for say this, but the commentary like "NO DUR SHERLOCK!" is kind of bringing the story down.

Uhm... how to say this... beside the snarking side commentary, that's episode 4 of the second season word for word... well, almost all of it if I can remember correctly, you just left out the confrontation with the robotic sheriff for the next chapter. Will be there something new, compared to canon, anytime soon or shall we put ourselves in long term waiting state?
Keep in mind also that if you're going for a dramatic atmosphere the snarks are a serious problem. They just won't make the plot work. If you go for a lighthearted fanfic instead... they're a problem too. Once in a while a comment or two is OK, but one every other paragraph distracts from the plot and someone may even find it annoying. Just saying. No offence intended.

Pretty cool , keep it and , if possible, make it a Sinoto.
There aren't enough

Suguha is Kazuto's sister... You mean Sugou?