Gunfire. Stopping a servant...
what a joke.

Honestly i know its war and all and i yhink he knows too and how hes weak in killing and she said she'd take advantage but really she kills waver.
Pls continue

I had hoped this story would be good, since I always wanted to see the Hunter get summoned as a Servant in the Fate series, but I immediately lost interest when you decided to add a new Servant class.

this chapter was more redeeming in adding a heartless quality guess dat thing wit saber was just a warning

bu-but she coulda eliminated saber doe she lost her honor long ago wtf

Very good story

I love this story I hope you can continue as long as you can, I can't wait to see what happens next and I love the inclusion of Cthullu as a great one, I'm pretty sure his mytho is what inspired Miyazaki to create bloodborne and it's story

Wow you killed off Waver that pretty dark that going to effect a lot of stuff later tbh he pretty important

Interesting this story has caught my attention, I will be taking a look at your profile and a follow :)

My only complaint is the there is only 7 chapters at the moment otherwise good story keep it up

She must end it quickly if she doesn't want those ones to come back to life like Amygdala did. Just to be sure, does this make her Type-Moon?

This story is QUITE good. Interesting to see someone do something so interesting with a Bloodborne crossover. I can't wait to see how you incorporate the cosmology of the Great Ones with the cosmology of the Fate/stay night nasuverse. Will the Great Ones (including Reyven, in her true form) be just a few more mere gods in the nasuverse, or are they more significant; maybe even connected to the Root in some way? Again, I can't wait to find out.
You are doing quite a good job with incorporating those good-old Lovecraftian horror undertones. That's pretty hard to pull off, so kudos to you.

Three criticisms:
- Garren is... kind of annoying. Just in general, really. Kind of whiny and judgemental/quick to judge, too. What was up with that random, situation-and-mood-inappropriate kiss, anyway?
- You could stand to tone down the whole "tortured soul" thing Reyven has going on just a TINY bit. Bloodborne Hunters are pretty much inherently messed up, and she isn't even HUMAN anymore, so shouldn't she be a bit more "above it all"? Ascendant being (i.e. Great One) and all that. Even aside from that, it's been HOW MANY thousands of years of at least semi-existence for her? Even the most warranted, greatest of angst should have an expiration date.
- Connected to the first, the romance you seem to be trying to build/establish between Reyven and Garren comes across as entirely unnecessary. I'm not even sure how to describe it, but it just seems straight-up, entirely unnecessary. Lol, not even in a particularly annoying or angering way; just... unnecessary. Kind of a weird impression I'm getting, to be honest. Anyway, if I were to TRY to give voice/justification to this claim, it would be that (1) romance doesn't seem very compatible with the Bloodborne franchise in general and (2) Reyven does NOT seem like that kind of character that can/should be "saved by love" (which I get the feeling you are moving in the direction of). You made it abundantly clear that Reyven has suffered and seen things LITERALLY beyond mortal comprehension. Heck, the REAL her IS beyond mortal comprehension. I think that trying to write romance for her would be almost as silly/weird as trying to write romance for Cthulhu.

Anyway, don't mind how long-winded my criticisms were. Constructive criticism is the only way I know to try and help. I'm not much good (and don't see much point) at praising the good. This story is amazing, and I can't wait for the next chapter.

Wishing you the best in all of your present and future creative endeavors,
Mary Sue Lover

Well written, good details and fight scene, pretty good characterization.

When I first laid eyes on this story, my expectations were low. Especially due to the OC master. However in the course of the five chapters that followed, you have blown my mind away with the sheer amount of suspense and obscurity lauered within. The POV rarely reached within the Hunters inner thoughts, making me sudpended on just what would happen next. In this recent chspter you have revealed more tools than in the entire story combined, again blowing me away with the small interest lancer has develoved for hunter after having his ass handed to him. That last part though... I wonder if Servants have enough Insight to even see something so... alien. Akin to the nature of Ea iteslf, a weapon alien to Gaia, yet too powerful to erase. Keep up the good work.

Well I hate writing reviews cause I have no confidence in my writing either but I'll try.

The most concerning things, before this chapter actually (now I'm not so sure). Is pacing and character interactions. The pacing of your story just feels weird to me, I'm not sure if it's because you went through half of the war and we've barely seen the Hunter interact with the other characters. Only the fights and Waver come to mind at the top if my head. It almost feels like you're writing this story parallel go the canon war, which is obviously not true. More point of views from canon characters would help. It would "confirm" the events that have happened. But other than that I like your story. Might even grow to love it from what just occured at the end there.

Also, I hope you don't let the lack of reviews get to you too much. You at least have the guts to write (unlike me).