Please continue this!

DUDE PLS UODATE

Hmm, interesting that Edward feels it's checkmate at this point. Kidnapping Bella seems like a first step in a longer strategy, not so much the final move. Wonder what your plans were beyond this?

On a side note , ignore the rude guest reviewers who don't even have the balls to login. it's not as if they've ever put themselves out there for criticism. they can't even own their own comments!

Just realized this isnt finished. how sad. not that i have any room to talk, lol.

Evil Emmett, huh?

Edward kidnapping Bella, who happens to mean about jack shit to Emmett is NOT "checkmate".

She saw him "glanced" down lol

"meet" the breeze...you meant MET?

Seriously whoever edited this for you should be fired

"women" at his feet? Bella is ONE person

the arrow "prodded" from his chest? You mean protruded?

"She felt felt her eyes getting wet"

that's a lot of felt...lol

"hurling it into side of mans face"

you mean into THE side?

She keeps demanding that shes not a puppet, but she is, as all women were in that time. I wish youd stop having her act so surprised about it.

Does Bella have no sense of loyalty to her family? Her kingdom? The kingdom is which she lives has been taken over by "barbarians" and she doesn't want to help right that wrong? Just saying. All she seems to think about is how shes treated like a second class citizen...when in reality she is and has always been such. She's acting more like a modern times girl thrown into the past. How can you miss something you've never had? Sure she might feel some injustice but she feels too much of it. It's just not believable.

Edwards family was killed when he was a boy and Emmett is the murderer? Are they both a lot older than Bella? I find it odd that Bella doesn't have one lady like bone in her body since she was raised to BE a lady.

Please update soon