Do you have any intentions of updating this story?

Hope you're okay!

Pls pls pls update I luv this story it’s da best but still no update but it’s still awesome thx for posting this great story!

Hey... I know you've probably forgotten all about this story and all but I just recently found your pal series and I have to say that you are the best storyteller that I have every seenight on this site. Also I know that just one persons opinions don't matter but I just love how you tell this and I would be so happy if you would update this or 'heatsong symphony' and I'm sure that many people think the same, so please update. I'm not even sure if you will see this but I would be so amazingly happy if you were to update. Thanks again for being an awesome writer :).

Hey bookprincess it may seem like I've only read the first chapter but in reality I've reread this story so many times because I love your writing, in fact I have only been able to read other pokemon fanfic if it involves the pal elite and the fact that you've stopped writing has really saddened me and a lot of other people I'm sure. Now I'm not even sure if you get the notification for this review but if you saw this and wrote another chapter (if you can get time for it in between work) then I'd be extremely happy. Thank you for this amazing series.

P.s the only ship I want to float is royaleshipping

I love this story! Please update it please!

While rosaline acted kind of out of line and she has a lot of flaws, I suggest rosaline and her friends should have a meaningful and heart to heart moment together. She needs them and you should send her off when rosaline and the group have the emotional talk. That is the best way to write her off I suggest. Hope you update soon.

Really neat! can't wait to see more!

Grammar corrections: (I am ignoring some small stuff like punctuation and word errors that may derive from auto correct. [i.e in vs into])

From: "If only our scribe is here." To: "If only our scribe was here." Why: When using the 'if only' use past tense. I don't know why English is like that, but it is. (Another example would be "I wish our scribe was here.")

From: "Alright, first thing's first. The Open House and night parties for all sororities and fraternities so the first years can decide which house to join, or not join at all. " To: "Alright, first things first: The Open house and night parties for all the soroities and fraternities so that the first year students may decide which house they want to join, if any." Why: Read it out loud, it flows better.

From: "...as they opened their bags to take out the application forms they had filled in, most searching the bag frantically..." To: "...as they opened their bags to take out the completed forms, most searching their bags frantically..." Why: Maintain plural, improve flow of the sentence.

From:"...you know. And to answer your question..." To: "...you know. To answer your question..." Why: Never start any sentence with a conjunction."

That is all for this story in terms of grammar, but the next big aspect is the conventions of your writing. All around, your ability to tell a story is good, however I do have some gripes. First, try to vary up the diction of your dialog. While world building requires a concise approach, these are supposedly mid-teenagers, broaden their diction some.

That streamlines into the next point, these are teenagers, add some uncertainty into their lives. I'm going to say you are/were one, and did not have a compete grasp of your life. Give them some human error, so that your cast is both more relatable and better developed. It doesn't have to be big either, have them miss a date, or be late to a club. Adding small aspects like those creates a huge difference.

That is really all I can think of for this story right now, sorry for any small errors, as this is written on my cell phone around 2 in the morning. (Autocorrect is a bitch.)

Damn no qonder rosaline was acting like that. I am pretty damn sad that she is being written off but there is nothing I can do to change your mind. Anway great chapter and hope to see much more in the future.

great chapter

As an answer to your pairing question, I would love to see Ash and Pakura together. I love this story already, and I definitely love your works. You, my friend, have earned a follow from me. Also, you should earn many more because you are an amazing writer.

Hey BookPrincess32! I know it's been like, forever since you've last looked at this, and obviously school has started, so therefor homework has started. So, ultimately you don't have much time to write. But can you please please please update these stories? They're so interesting, and I really want to know what happens next, and if Ash and Co. ever figure out Amethyst's secret in this story.

Now, for the question stuff.
2) She should be known as Pakura Ameyuri
3) RoyalShipping!
4) Shiki should remain dead, while Pakura is still alive
5) How about... Inverse World? Does that sound lame af?

Vote: Pakura

Thanks so much!
-Swishy03

So good. Update as always

The pairings for them I think should be rosaline x jude it makes sense to me. And then phillip x maybe jasmine