God, this story is just so all over the place. The pacing is okay, but the tone is bipolar. It's fun to read, but If I even begin to take it seriously I just wanna trash on it. There's so much contrived stuff thrown in for no reason at all just to push a plot point or joke.

Overall, I like the writing, but I feel like this story can't decide if it's a comedic slice of life series or a full-on story. It's trying to be somewhere in between, but it just doesn't blend well for me. Personally, I feel like without fully committing to either one it's just gonna end up being out of touch with a majority of the things that happen, leaving your readers thinking, "Oh, that's cool...but why was it just thrown in?"

I like the comedic bits, but the more serious parts make me want to take it so. Unfortunately, if I do then all of the out of place stuff is really jarring. I'm just gonna ignore the more serious stuff for now as it seems to be the best way to enjoy the story.

is this dead?

Damn, this is hella straightforward.

So Jaune was a part of White Fang for two years without Aura? Weird, but okay.
If Jaune is so bad at combat, the fuck did he try to 1v1 Roman for? He got shit on. Also, one shot from Melodic oneshot his entire Aura? The fuck

Is going to not actually act on any of the knowledge he gains about girls wanting him?
Are you forgetting he is a hormonal teenage male, what is this self control . . .

Aaaaaaaaaaand Jaune just cheated on Yandere Pyrrha... this will not end well...

It's good it's funny but I stopped reading right after he told her what his power was and why was the dude following him right after the fight like a love struck stalker that part doesn't make any sense to me

Maybe, one of your better stories

holy shit, this is getting better and better each chapter i read...

bit concerning if i'm being honest

the thirst is real and extreme with this one.

i fucking love it

I dont get why jaune is always a bitch in all the fanfiction. I mean bitch as in he gets punched for an accident the says that he deserved it and doesn't retaliate in any way like a total fuckin beta.

it was really cool back then, now with all this new stuff became a trash, really who cared about his oc sister? wtf

... Going on from my last comment, maybe the lack of page breaks is something I'm seeing due to being on mobile? I don't know. If that's the case, ignore me.

Y'all need to put in breaks for when the scene changes. The start of chapter 18 had me confused.

Heh, you gave Weiss's father's name to Jaune's instead. Hecking nerd.