Dear author,

this was a excellent story but please hurry up. Oh and i know your pain of homework. I had a essay a book report of 100 pages. And i had a science exam to take so i know how you feel. Well just keep your grades up. Your patient reader,

alexandria lynn J.

I just wanna say thanks to cherry blossom and the random reviews, i was a little discouraged by the reviews ;p i didnt really see a point to continuing the story if people disliked it enough to read it, hate it enuff, then just say bad stuff x_X; oh well! _! ill continue the story eventually, kinda tied up in homework lately, the years ending and i need good grades! *_*! thanks for the support, next chapter will be up a.s.a.p.! i wub yew al

ok...Laurel Whitiney or whoever said this ( I know this person's review is old...but whatever)...apparently your reading comprehension is not too good considering that

a) Fayte did NOT try to seduce the man who tried to rape her and whom she dislikes so much

b) FAYTE didn't stab him, Legolas did...duh (why else would she say..."what took you so long?")

maybe you should go back and read that part again.

But i do agree with you on the punctuation, spelling, etc. It would make the story easier to read.

ok...I now think I know why you haven't updated. I read all of the reviews, or should I say flames. I'm seriously wondering why these people keep reading the story and reviewing if they hate it so much. I agree that constructive criticism is necessary to make a writing piece better but seriously...I have to agree that more than half of you are DEFINITELY not being constructive. Do you have no lives or something, so you have to go and virtually shred the story, squash it flat, run over it with a car, peel it off, throw it off a cliff, and then pin up the squhed, run over, and maimed story and throw petty insults at it? ( and you know what? I know that was a run on sentence for those of you who think you are the ultimate grammar and spelling afficionados.) I hate to sound like I'm over-reacting , and I guess I sort of am, but how many times do you have to point out the same mistake, I think Wave gets the point. People all have different views and opinions. You may want something to be changed or not like the style while others may love it. She can't please everyone you know. You make the story sound like it was written by a 4 year old who comes from another galaxy or something. If you don't like the story, then don't read it.

I also have to say that it would help if some of the adivce were taken to heart. If a reviewer says something is unclear, or the grammar is wrong, then change it so the story can become easier to read. Those of you who are upset about how Wave changed the characters, its her story and all she was using really was the setting and the names of characters from the book and movie. Sorry if I sound threatening or like I am over reacting, but this really bothered me. Oh yeah, and sorry this was such a long review (if you can call it that...)

I love your writing style and I think that your story is great. Personally, I really don't find it very Mary-Sue...I guess it really depends on your opinion though. So she can defend herself and has good looks, I know quite a few people like that. I don't see a problem with the tortured past thing either. I think you should keep up with the story but hey, like I said, that's my opinion.

Hey there,

I came back to check up on your story. Your writing style moves quickly, and is ingaging. The song interludes are a little distracting when reading the story, but that's just me. Keep up the good work.

As to your question, what is a Mary Sue. A Mary Sue is a girl in a fanfiction story who is impossibly beautiful and talented. She usually possesses the qualities the author wishes she had. Mary Sues usually have tortured pasts and are related in some way to a Canon character.

I'm sorry to say, but your Fayth is a Mary Sue. She's an incredible fighter, beautiful, and Elrond's daughter. If you read several other fan fiction stories out there, especially romances, the main character is usually a Mary Sue. The biggest problem I have with Sues is that I can't relate to them- I mean I'm not perfect in everything I do. They also are a bit boring because once you read one story with a Sue, you've read them all.

I'm not trying to be mean. Most authors start out with a Sue character and then develop more original characters. Other people enjoy Mary Sue stories, as long as they are well-written. And your story is definetely well-written.

So keep on working on your writing and you'll do great.

whats with this mary-sue thing? can someone please explain it to me -_-; its starting to get annoying.

What is it about Mary Sue?

UPDATE SOON! its been so long since u updated so u better update soon!

-Shanna

First off I would like to say good job on the beginning of your first fan fic. There are a few things I could point out. While it is true that you do/did tend to over use 'her, she, his, and he' I can see where in the beginning you wanted to keep the names sort of hidden. You could take a few commas and put them else where. You did nothing wrong that isn't completly common! :)

As for Faramir, yes I have read the book, three times if you must know. And yes he was a very honorable man in the book. But this is your story my dear. In your own story you are allowed to mold the characters to your liking. It has been done with every member. If we were to stick to such strict rules then all of the slash fics should be flamed also. So by all means, do what you feel is right for your story.

Cement? Hey, if you can dream it then you can write it. Do I know if cement was around then? Hell no! Do I care? Nope, sure don't. Until I read the other reviews, I didn't notice.

Mary sue? Yes I see it. I've never really been clear on the whole mary sue thing. If she is half way attractive, doesn't smell like a cave troll and has all of her teeth then she is a mary sue? Lord help us if a woman in a story can fend for herself. If a strong confident woman is a mary sue, then sign me up! I'm only 23, I think I would make a great mary sue.:)

Last but not least. Legolas, yes it's been done time and again. And it will be done till the whole Legolas craze is over. It's not for anyone to say when the last Legolas romance has been written. People think it's so old, yet continue to read. Odd isn't it? One would think they would simply stop reading.

I have rambled long enough, I hope my review wasn't nasty, I didn't try to be at all. Bravo to you, because I have read much worse! With some practice, you will be a wonderful author! Keep up the good work. I will be keeping an eye on this story. I expect great things from it! Don't let anyone get you down, I want to see this story finished!

please no flamers ;.; i seem to get more every time i ask if u restrain from putting them on. im sorry i made faramir look bad, i realize rivendell is not a 'kingdom' but i needed a good word ;.; please please pleeeasse! no flaming or harsh critisizing. i dont wanna lose any fans and im saying now that this story is based on the movie NOT the book. u.u thank yew.

Oh, and Rivendell isn't a kingdom.

One thing I am sure you'd like to know.

As I am sure Elisabeth Morningstar has told you many times by now,

FARAMIR ISN'T LIKE THAT!

Faramir isn't some evil lust-driven maniac! Even though Peter Jackson portrayed him as as much, Faramir would NEVER EVEN THINK about trying that on a girl! HE'S THE BLOODY CAPTAIN OF GONDOR! AUGH! AND he's one of my favourite characters, because he's so PURE and HONEST and RESISTED THE RING. *DEATH GLARE at Peter Jackson* it's ALL PJ'S FAULT! He made Faramir seem like that, so I don't blame you for drawing that conclusion. But...rrg!

Oh, and Elves don't hate men. "I bring word from Elrond of Rivendell. An alliance once existed between Men and Elves. Long ago we fought and died together. We come to honour that allegiance..." Did you miss that part or sumthin?

Sorry, had to get that out of my system. I reeeally don't like Faramir character disruptions, because the Faramir I know from Tolkien's books, frankly, KICKS ASS. _ But if it wasn't for that, I might actually enjoy, or at least tolerate, this story. You might want to pay a little more attention to grammar, and your character is one of the most blatant Mary Sues I have ever seen - not that that's necessarily bad, mind you, I'm just saying. And it really helps, if you're writing fanfiction for a book, to read the book you're writing about. But other than that, this story isn't too bad. :)

You have been officially flamed/constructively criticized by

~Rosie Cotton aka The Evil Author (tm)~

Whoa! Just one comment here, more directly related to the story than the last one: It's really rather unrealistic to have Elrond yelling at his daughter. Elrond was quite a kind man, and never raised his voice that we know of (except in the Last Alliance battle scene, in which he looked rather hot...er, back on topic...in which he was yelling commands. So I think that's probably not a good thing to have him do.

wolfsoul: Thanks for your answer-if you want to talk more maybe we should move this to email instead of cluttering up the review boards, unless Wave-Crush doesn't mind. I agree with you that it's good to phrase even negative comments in a kind way. But taking someone's advice when they tell you you should change something is NOT necessarily the same as becoming a drone. Of course you have to weigh things in your own mind and decide whether or not to take their advice, and free advice is often worth what you paid for it. But if you can't ever take anyone's advice, or are unwilling to ever change anything you write, that's a sign of arrogance, not originality. If you were an architect and someone came by and said, "That house you're building isn't going to fit in the lot you have to fit it in," wouldn't you check and see if he was right? If he happened to be right and you ignored him, you could cause yourself a lot of difficulty later when it turned out that your house was encroaching on the neighbor's land and you had to tear it down and start over. It's kind of like that in writing: sometimes it pays to take advice, because it can actually improve the end product. Think of it this way: if you're getting a lot of negative reviews, why is that? Maybe the world is just full of mean bitches. Possible. But it's also possible that the reviewers have a point and there's a basis in fact for why they disliked it. Anyway, this is a very interesting sort of discussion to have, and I do agree with you that kindness is important when reviewing. Nobody likes flames! My dad, a teacher, always told us to use the "sandwich model": nice comment first, then what you disliked, then follow up with a final nice comment. Works better than either mindless praise or knee-jerk flaming.

Pax,

Elisabeth Morningstar