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Awesomeness please continue

HOO is one of the best book Series I have ever read even though I wish Percy would train his dangerous powers

My only complaint is that you shorten the story so much. Otherwise, it’s great, but the ... are really starting to annoy me.

languague grant? that means zeus and the other gods why didnt you tell her

Finally! A good prophecy.

Sorry, but the horses came loooooong before the chariot. Even in the Greek myths.

I loved this book. I can't wait to read the second one.

This is understandable. I have them too.

was that a pun like you typed we are travling in time now we need nico ah PERFECT TIMING

Just a few Thoughts:

I really don't know why you trued to explain away Annabeth's crush on Luke, which Is Canon... I think it takes away somewhat from the awesomeness of Riordan's story, and doesn't really add much to your own. Their is nothing wrong with a little girl having a crush in someone who saved her and she greatly admired, even if it did evtnually settle as simply sibling love.

I'm not quite sure why, but your interpretation of the Curse of Achilles incorrect. When Percy fights Luke (And I beleive it's the younger Luke as well from the Lighting Thief timeline), Percy should have wiped the floor with him. Not only is it stated in Canon that by then Percy is a superior sword fighter to Luke, but the Curse of Achilles massively increases speed, physical strength and stamina. Percy was, without having full control, able to take on anywhere between several dozen to a hundred monsters near by himself in several minutes at lightning speed... The Curse of Achilles does alot more than simply make you invulnerable (At least in the Last Olympian). It basicly takes all your physical attributes and turbocharges them with the divine equivalent of super steroids. Simply saying that, unless Percy held himself back massively (Which its implied he has difficultly with, the Curse of Achilles making him loose control somewhat), then Luke should have been torn to shreds.

The inclusion of new Prophecies seems abit... forced? I don't know. Maybe it's just the fact they don't really fit very well, lack the elegant rhyme scheme of Riordan's and are far too blunt, but IMO they just don't really work. Especially considering prophecies by the Oracle are only meant to be given for Quets or once / twice a more general prediction of the future for Great Prophecies. Yet you have the Oracle spouting out prophecies seemingly for the fun of it.

A relaitlvt minor thing I noticed is that Thalia sometimes seems to have insight into Zoe's and Percy's conversations during Titans Curse. Unless I'm mistaken, they were spoken to Percy in confidence, Zoe and him privately bonding over the course of the Quest whiles Zoe and Thalia baerly looked at each other. In respect if her memory I don't see Percy or Artermis going around and telling everyone Zoe's deepest personal secrets and regrets, so I just don't understand where Thalia seems to get all the info from. I suppose their could be a group counselling session in the Hunt where they share their experiences, but somehow Zoe doesn't seem like the kind of person that would go around telling people those things.

Thalia's feelings for Luke seem to develop far too soon. Riordan did give hints that they had deeper feelings for one another, but they clearly never had enough time in development to go beyond familial love. Yet Aprohdite just comes out saying she 'loves him'. It just felt abit rushed.

Thalia says Kronos spoke too all the demigods - which doesn't seem likely. I don't imagine him wasting his limited energy on influencing the dreams of hundreds of demi-gods, which would inevitably result in his discovery and forcing the gods into action against him. I always presumed he was far more careful with his targets - only entering the minds of those truly in despair as well as the incredibly powerful Demi-gods that were worth the risk, such as the children of the Big Three.

Towards the end when you have the gods discussing the great prophecy the lines get mixed up and merged to try and make different points. You say a 'A heroes choice shall end his days'. That's not the line. Instead it's something lkke 'A single choice shall end his days', referring to Percy giving Luke the dagger in reference to the previous line, which is 'A heroes soul, cursed blade shall reap'. A relatively minor detail, but considering its the Great Prophecy the gods had spent the last half a century freaking out over, I presume they would know the exact wording of the great prophecy.

Its implied in Chapter 29 by Thalia that the gods would fade without the worship of Demi-gods. Whiles this might be true for many other Pantheons - I think it's made clear the Greek Pantheon essentially got around the need for worship by tying themselves into Western Civilisation - fundamentally bonding Western Civilsation to the Olympian Pantheon, so that they couldnt fade unless they were destroyed in a divine war or Western Civilisation was destroyed.

Another thing I picked up on is that Luke's fatal flaw in canon was excessive wrath - he was easily angered and it comepltly overpowered and blinded him, and no matter what happend he couldn't let it go. This is what made him the perfect choice for Kronos. Take several things that a normal demi-god might be angry for, but eventually forgive the gods, and apply them to Luke, and you have a recipe for him to be so furious he wants to wage a war of extinction against his own family, no matter who or what gets in the way. He is so blinded by his wrath that, even when faced with Thalia forgiving the gods, he still wants to kill them for what happend to her.

Rachel time?

apollo none of the kids should have to deal with that they have done nothing wrong, well except luke that little bastard should go to tartarus

really percy your scared of dionysus who is one of the weakest gods around, at least in my opinion? also when talking about getting nico into school percy and annabeth sound like parents lol

you could make amphitrite and percy close, i mean step parents and children do tend to eventually, most of the time, grow close, and when it comes to the greco-roman world sally can't exactly help percy so i mean there is that