What an adorable one shot of the Leonhart family! I noticed early on that their son's name was Japanese and their daughter's name wasn't. Not sure why you made that decision, but the story wasn't affected by it, so:..water under the bridge, right?

I think you did a lovely job with giving your characters life. I'd like to see more of these cute love bugs some day. Keep writing! Thanks for sharing, Ao Sekai.

This was the realm of over-the-top-funny! :) Squall was a bit OOC, but nine years of marriage to Rinoa mellow you down a LOT. In any case, I wasn't expecting that.

Just a few grammar and punctuation lapses here and there - some of the spoken lines didn't have quotation marks, and stuff like that. Other than that, great job!

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