Ty for ur work!

I'm surprised that after the ellipses, we see inside a conference room where everyone is arguing then suddenly Tsuna bursts right through the door, dying will the strongest it's ever been and asks "What's the problem?"

I can't blame Reborn he has some pretty good reason to shoot Tsuna right now. I also have to agree with him, especially about Gokudera being Italian.

Do one on when mukuro and hibari both try and propose to chrome at the same time but keep ruining each others plans to, that would be funny to read

Hahahahaha omg Tsuna, seriously dude!
hilarious!

Update fast

Okay Tsuna, babe, you are a Boss... 24...a mafioso... and you get down with some dirty promises...like seriously...

I don't like KHR, but I wanted to check all your stories to see how your style goes.
This is cute, a little fluffy too. There are some mistakes but they improve with time, I'm sure you can do it if you get enough experience writing the characters.

I'm waiting for the next chapter to see what you got else...

Okay so I thought I posted my review but apparently I didn’t. I had typed it out in word document and apparently didn’t saved it so here I am writing this once more from the bottom of my heart.

First of all!

This is MOST DEFINITELY not the worst fan fiction. Not now. Not ever. Neva! In fact there are fan fiction out there with a ridiculous amount of reviews, favors and alerts and those fan fiction aren’t exactly what I’d consider the best or even remotely good type. However, one favorable thing about these fan fictions besides the rate at which they are updated it’s the fact the authors pour their heart, soul and imagination into the fan fiction and I respect that most. The same can be applied to this story.

I am not a fan of KHR; however, I wouldn’t mind reading one or two every once in a while. This is definitely not boring. I’m actually a bit interested to see what else you’ll throw in for some updates.

This is a story designed as a place where you can throw your ideas about various pairings and I like that.

Ultimately fan fiction authors are writing to please their fans and why shouldn’t they; otherwise, they’d basically be no reason to write fan fiction so when fan fiction writers publish their story they’re not doing it for themselves, but also for fans who crave to see their favorite characters from various animations, comics etc in situations and circumstances the creator themselves have never done nor has the intention of ever doing. With that being said having someone say your fan fiction is the worse out there is very cruel and hurtful and ultimately is probably the truth. But FROM their perspective’s which might I add does not constitute everyone else’s. If it’s the worse as an author I’d appreciate people telling me why it’s the worse that way I can improve or the scenes in which they thought was horrible.

Criticism without explanation is outdated.

So let me conduct an illustration as to how constructive criticism is done.

Cons
1)I am also guilty of this charge. However, there are spelling and grammatical errors. A beta reader can definitely fix this or rereading multiple times too.
2)A little more detail would be nice in terms of the background of this world you’ve created but I understand this is something like a drabble so this is acceptable yet still a little bit more background on the characters info would’ve been nice.

Pros
1)I can picture it exactly in my head. Once a reader can picture exactly what you are writing then I’d say congratulations are in store and you my friend have definitely done that.
2)Intrigue to see what you’ll do next.
The plot is extremely simple and focus on the relationship between Tsuna and Kyoko and that is definitely not bad. I liked how the first cake was messed up by LAMBO! and poor Tsuna had to suffer because of it. I can so understand why he’d be skeptical of having another go at another of his lady’s cake and omg! He fainted! Damn as boss you’d think he’d grow lolXD

Can I put in a request of seeing a hot, dark sexy mature Tsuna with Kyoko pwease!
Need I say anymore.

Do hibari/chrome/mukuro love triangle haha

I like this i want more don't listen to the readers that say it's not good they are just stupid yaoi lovers.

Keep writing ~ looking foreword for the next chapter ;) :) XD

Lol Tsuna got too excited of Kyoko's promise xD

This is a well thought out adorable story. I do wish i could write love scenes as well as you. I think your writing is fantastic. Great job!

This is apparently the worst fanfic ever