This story is honestly fantastic ! I hope you're safe and well during these trying times ️

This is a great story please update again soon :)

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This is an amazing story and I can't wait to see how everything turns out. As a psychology major, I have to say I love how accurately you portray both Percy's depression and PTSD even down to her unexpected relapse this chapter. Thank you so much for sharing.

So overall, pretty good story. I don't like that Klaus is considered on the same power level as Gods in Percy's opinion, or that he and the other Originals could be considered threats to her. She fought titans and giants. I don't see how vampires, even the Originals, could ever compare.

I also dislike how Klaus sees Emma as his daughter. I really don't see how this addition strengthens the story. I feel like it takes away from it if anything. I like reading about the interactions between the PJ characters and the VD characters, not random OC characters that really don't matter... There's just too much focus on her, and it's such a huge change from VD canon, whereas you didn't add any OCs for PJ. I hope she doesn't get anymore POVs in future cuz those are really uninteresting.

I like that Percy is finally starting to work towards controlling her powers and testing her limits. I always wished there was more focus on that in canon. I look forward to reading about her gaining control over herself and her life. I also sincerely hope that this ends up as a Percy/Apollo story in the end. They are just too much in love with each other to ever be with anyone else from what I've read. It seems like they needed space to find each other again. It's not made clear at all why they broke up in the first place considering how much they love one another, so I hope you finally explain what caused the breakup. I also hope Percy teaches Klaus some serious humility and shows him how utterly weak he is compared to her, and how insignificant he really is compared to Gods and Monsters. He's so disgusting, thinking about how to use Percy and Nico like the gods used them. I can't tell if Percy only pretended to agree to serve him as part of a plan, or if she intends to follow through with it. I really hope it's a lie because after all her pain at being used by the gods, I really can't see her allowing herself to be used by anyone again, even to buy her family's safety. With her powers, she should be able to protect him, and threaten anything that might threaten them without having to sell herself for it.

I hope you update again soon. Thanks.

I'm really disappointed with the scene between Emma and Klaus. I was really hoping Emma could just be a normal girl not connected to the supernatural world, who would only become involved in it because of Percy. I feel like you ruined the introduction of Klaus by making him seem like a good guy willing to take care of a little girl right off the bat, rather than have Percy slowly discover the human side of him. I dislike the fact that this random OC is becoming more and more important when there are so many canon characters who could have been used instead.

This story is focusing so much on Percy's PTSD that everything else is taking a backseat. I like that Percy is seeing the truth about the gods, especially her father, and is moving away from that. I don't like that the crossover point of the story is so secondary. Percy's angst and rage is almost overwhelming. I thought that this would be more of a romance considering the description. I also don't understand why it took so long for Percy to accept that not all monsters are bad. I keep thinking about Tyson, and how he's a cyclops, and yet Percy never judged him for the horrible actions of other cyclopes. Technically, Tyson is considered a monster, yet Percy accepted him.

Glad to get a description of Percy. I didn't like that you said "her body was alright too." I would have preferred an actual description of her height and body type, lean but curvy or whatever it is. "Her body was alright too" doesn't actually say anything about her body type. I also wish you described her face aside from her eyes and having a pretty smile. I think, however, that you went a bit too far in describing how utterly beautiful she is and how everyone falls in love with her. I think you could have said it in fewer words that would still get the point across. You also have Percy moaning over how tired she is of being the new girl and all the attention she gets, and how much she misses camp. She chose to leave camp and go to Mystic Falls knowing she'd be the new girl and that she'd get attention there. It comes across as kinda whiny and annoying since she decided to be in that situation knowing the consequences already. I was hoping she'd be beautiful, but also that she'd be mostly unaware of how beautiful she truly is. Something which would only add to her appeal.

Also, adding that quip about Apollo saying she was almost a Mary-Sue should be removed. Nobody says that in real life. That's something we say when referring to story characters only. He could instead say that she seems to good to be true, that would be a much more realistic comment.

Also, nobody would be talking about the new "poor" family in town. Why would they be classified as poor? Paul will be working as a teacher, which makes a decent enough wage, and there are plenty others with that job in town as well. They would be classified as middle class, so Percy shouldn't even have that thought at all. I highly doubt she would ever think about how others perceive her family's financial situation, especially not upon moving there where nobody even knows them yet.

I find it a little annoying that Percy is constantly worried about "going dark again," as if she had been some villain for a period of her life who did terrible deeds. She did one bad thing, that doesn't mean she "went dark." All it means is that she did one thing that is considered dark. She's not an evil person, and I hardly believe that she actually worries about turning evil even if she enjoyed feeling powerful for a moment. It would make more sense if Percy was afraid of losing herself to feel powerful again, but that was always Thalia's fatal flaw, not hers.

I think the hallucination was going too far. Percy comes across as really weak. I definitely agree that there would be side effects from Tartarus, but I'm disappointed that Percy is obviously not handling it as well as Nico and Annabeth. I worry that Percy's serious issues are going to take away from building her relationships with the Vampire Diaries characters. How can she even have healthy relationships if she's insane? I don't want to see her get involved with a guy, whoever you will have her paired with, and he be the one to put her back together. Percy should be able to put herself back together before becoming involved in anything else, or with anyone else. She already has her own demons to deal with, so moving to a new place with parents who are mortal in a town filled with new monsters is hardly the way to get over her past trauma.

I'm disappointed that Riptide is a pen when not in its true form. For canon Percy that makes sense, but fem Percy would have a much easier time with a piece of jewelry than a pen. Like Thalia's shield bracelet.

I'm pretty sure there would be no Walmart in Mystic Falls. You call it a city at the start of the chapter, but it's really just a small town.

Still a lot of spelling mistakes, but not too bad. I was surprised when you changed from following Percy using third-person limited to suddenly following Alaric's thoughts for a brief moment. That was an error to watch out for in future. If you're using third-person limited, it means you're following a specific person although not in first-person. Third-person omniscient is when you follow everyone's thoughts, but you were clearly using limited but then you jumped to another person.

I like Percy so far. I like that you didn't make her perfect, and that she has a lot to overcome. I wish you had tagged the pairing though, since I have no clue what to expect. I also wish you would describe her appearance. All I know is that she has shoulder length black curls and sea green eyes, probably tanned skin too I imagine.

I look forward to reading more. I'm excited where this may be headed.

Not a bad start. First sentence of the story is grammatically incorrect. It should be "Have you made a decision" or "Did you make a decision." I'm confused by you saying that Annabeth left Camp, but is going to school nearby, but then afterwards say she's in San Fransisco near Camp Jupiter instead. Also, Virginia and California on opposite ends of the country. It's like a 40 hour drive to get from Virginia to Cali so that Percy can visit Annabeth. You say that Percy will be close to Annabeth and Camp Jupiter while in Virginia, but that's not true at all. She'll be way closer to New York and Camp Half-Blood. Paul does mention that to Percy, which makes the fact that you stated the opposite just before pretty strange.

Also, Sally tells Percy that there are beaches around town in Mystic Falls, which is impossible since it's not supposed to be located around the coast. I get why it would be better for the story since she's Poseidon's daughter, but yeah. Other than that, a lot of mistakes with conjugation, but spelling is pretty good. I look forward to reading where this is going.

Yooooooooo! I’M SO FREAKING HAPPY THAT YOU UPDATED! WHOEVER SAID ANYTHING BAD ABOUT THIS STORY CAN JUST DISAPPEAR! I LOVE YOUR WRITING AND SERIOUSLY YOU HAVE MORE DEPTH AND NOT CRINGEY PLOT(whooppss sorry for all capslock) honey forget about those dofoos with no life. It must be mentally exhausting right now for you and for what’s happening, keep safe love. Forget about these racist motherfrackers. I’ll be waiting again for your update. Seriously sweetheart this story SLAY(despite me being a frustrated writer knows which is cringey and predictable plots but THIS honey this is TREASURE! I LOVE how you still kept their characters intact especially percy despite the genderbend, and Nico like some of the stories I’ve read are OCC and just meh, but I guess they tried their best but you know) I don’t mean to drag them down I know how hard to keep track of the characters behaviour on every chapters but you, you made me absolutely brilliant. Don’t give this story up sweetheart pretty please? I know It’s kind of selfish but for the love of gods, your story is the only thing I found beautiful in this category of crossovers. Keep safe!

Ok, Percy and Apollo NEED to get back together. I ship them so hard.

I have been following this story for a couple of years. I love it! Don’t worry about the haters because honestly your English is better than mine.

OMG this story's awesome!

Please update soon it’s so good and I can’t wait for more