good chapter when s the next update.

amazing story please update

rip dead fic, hoped he would updateforever sobbing)

Great story! Can't wait for the next update!

"He has finished his normal patrol which passed with no snitches"
The saying is 'without a hitch'

So

He has finished his normal patrol which passed without a hitch

Please update, this story is brilliant

please update this fic again

Welp, it seems this fic is dead like this account of yours...

Incident, not accident. Use dictionary, please.
And it's heeding one advice, not heading with someone advice.

'Range', not 'rang'.
'Rang' is past tense of 'ring'.

'Initial confrontation', not 'confirmation'. 'Confirmation' is noun of 'confirm', which is the act of verifying something to be true, or to show that you agree with something.

'A sudden chakra pulse' not 'a sudden chakra plus'. What is chakra plus?
And it's 'Shine-Shone-Shined', not 'shinned'...That word doesn't exist.

'Human realm', not 'human plan'. Human plan is...plan that was made by human. And 'Plain' speaks of simplicity, straightforwardness, bored-looking things, things that are flat, or a large space of relatively even grass terrain. There are more to this words, but you could just use the dictionary.

What the fuck did you mean to say when you used 'power-ass fighting ability'?
Powerful fighting ability? Great prowess in fighting? What?

'Scurry away', not scrum away.

'Casually', not 'causally'.

'strange enough'...What? It's 'Strong enough'

And it's 'abandoned', not 'abounded'.

'Not much longer' not 'no longer'.
'No longer' indicate that something that has been happening ends at the specified moment. I may be at the present, it may be in the past.

And it's 'whether' when something is questioned if it is one or another.
Example (Ex):
"Whether you are ready or not, danger will comes for you."
"I'm unsure whether the weather will be rain or sunny."

"sings the tunes without the words". What?
"Singing wordless tunes" would be better. Much better.

'Grin' not 'Grain'...Grain is something we made into food.

Uhm...While using Kyuubi Chakra, he/she heals from near fatal injuries and continue the fight...
That heal fast if given a moment of rest that is talked about here is more Uzumaki Vitality.
We've also never seen any Uzumaki ever die of natural Aging process on-screen, too.

Great story.

Update please! _

Cuando actualizas llevas un tiempo sin hacerlo y vas a ser MadaNaru