Interesting second person.

I love the subtle comfort Gary gives.

Wow, I have never read a story that I actually enjoyed written in the 2nd person narrative. That's damn hard to pull off, especially with a lemon - nice work! I enjoyed the rivalry dynamic you showed between them.

How does this not have more reviews? I thought this was very well written and I loved it. Was sad not to see a second chapter!

That was so sweet, I like how Ash got his spirits back in the end. I also liked how relaxed the whole thing was, both exchanging jabs between and having good time despite Ash's loss.