they are in unit-1 huh?

Very impressive! Except for some wrong tenses it is a perfect story. I really liked it and I hope that you'll write some more soon.

Very good chapter, very good indeed! The idea of using hypnosis to counter the angel's mind attack is very intelligent, I don't remember it being ever used before. Keep the good work!

Great chapter! I like how Asuka still has her confidence. I saw at least a few errors but nothing that really messes with the story. Keep up the good work and release the next chapter ASAP.

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Well first let m get this out of the way. There are several spots of misused and missing words and it tends to distract from the story good as it is.
Get s native english speajer to pre read for you, weather British, Aussie, or American.
Now to the review,
the storyline is developing nicely and with a definitely different twist. I really like the way the trio is working together ans Rei is thinking of Shinji more than a collegue.
Please continue and I wonder if they allow Husbands to get beat up by their rather irate wives! I'd sure loved to see that!
dennisud

anothere good chapter i await the next eagerly. Rei, Shinji should end up wit Rei. Ja-ne (_)

Well written and very smooth. I liked the fact that Rei isn't satisfied with her existence after all. If she were, she would truly be a doll. Looking forward to the next chapter.

What's there to say about this fic besides being a really great story? Looking forward to reading the next chapter.

just to let you know, the "boys in blue" are the police. _

Good chapter, I can't find major problems with it.

Already waiting for the next one... _

I'm really curious to see if Commander Fuyutsuki will carry on SEELE's plans or if he has his own scenario... And is Yui brainwashing Gendo in some way? _

There are still some grammatical errors and some phrases that don't make sense but overall an interesting story. No real love interests here other than in Gendo's dream world. That last bit with Shinji & Rei was heart warming but still doesn't clue you in on any changes between them. Asuka getting escued so quick makes for an interesting climax for her fighting the angel. Her smile at a bewildered Shinji says much also.

Having the 15th angel hang there for , what over a day will have to be dealt with , plus with it's phsycic abilities it should be interesting what will happen. Finally what will happen with Gendo now? Stay in a coma or come back with his old attitiude or be diffeent, ToRei, Shinji?

Well, we will see eventually.

dennisud

interesting, you realy need a nateive english speeking person to preread for you keep up the good work Ja-ne (_)

halo, i am idigo montoya. you killed my father, prepair to die. Or in this case is should be hellow i am shinji ikari, this is my mother, prepair to die. a good start on to the next chapter...

*heh* Where's a blush emoticon when you really need one?;

Very nice and sneaky, Athos. I really wondered how you were going to deal with the 15th and you throw a cliffy in the works! The lowering of the LCL pressure was a surprise. I totally forgot they could do stuff like that! Good one!

The characters seem spot on. The exploration of Gendo's love/frustration and Rei's slightly shaken introspection created an enjoyable chapter. Your grammar needs a touch up though, the 'smoothing'instead of 'soothing' got a little distracting.

Overall this story is shaping into a very interesting and compelling read. Yah got me hooked damn it!:p

Look forward to the next chapter.