(1) I only watched the animé and didn't read the manga or light novel but I never saw Aoki being rude to Tatsuya... Also I almost thought at first that you were using the word "perverse" wrong until I stumbled upon the next definition "perverse
adjective
showing a deliberate and obstinate desire to behave in a way that is unreasonable or unacceptable."
So bravo for using it in a context that up until today I didn't know it could be used in and by the way this fic rocks so far where fluff and romance is concerned so the only problem I have so far is with the first part of my assessment of this fanfiction

The high intimacy in chapter 4 worked great!

Okay, this story started off very good, and I really mean it. Your English is good and matches the way the light novel was written, however, and I am sorry to say this, but there is so many thoughts shown and Tatsuya seems realllyyyyy OOC. He sounds a bit like a 14 or 15 year old girl giddy with himself and somewhat eager to go into things with Miyuki and with the politics of this world, their family dynamic, and Japanese conservative culture, I feel like Mahouka characters actually act like 30 year olds in cannon. Perhaps you should have stayed writing in Miyuki's perspective because then it would sound more believable. Although I do really ship Miyuki and Tatsuya together and fully disagree with the slowwww af progress they are making in the light novel, this story is going a little too fast.

It's hard to find a good story that's well written and has a good plot, and I have to say you started this off so close to achieving these two things, but then it's just... I don't need to know Miyuki is the only one that makes Tatsuya feel–it's already been stated many times in the LN, and when has Tatsuya actually blushed in the LN?

I think it's easier to fix a style and change plot points relative to improving overall English grammar and spelling. Therefore, I am sure you will soon be able to improve the overall quality and accuracy of this :)

I'm sorry. But I really like these two. I kinda hope that they get together (or we at least see them again).

Kouichi is certainly good in having dreams that'll never succeed

Your Miyuki breaks her "Ojou-sama" persona too easily tbh.

girl talks pretty good

cute

Actualiza pronto.

Hola este es mi primer comentario me encanto tu fanfic ,espero con ansias el próximo capítulo.

This is just a quick grammar check but I think you meant predicted not precipitated, which means rained. :D

Just loving the amount of detail you are adding to your stories that flesh out so well the series itself.

Awesome work you are doing here!

Ok now truly your once good Story turned to TRASH! How you make Maya and the whole Yotsuba the Bad Guys its annoying. Its sad I really enjoyed your Story but this is really really BAD! I mean i can clearly seee favortism to the Saegusa here. Its sad how you picture Maya and the Yotsuba. Sorry but I think the Yotsuba are truly great but missunderstood Family. Eisaku i think would never do something like this and also Maya even if she is a little Insane/Crazy, its a good Crazieness. I mean she did some bad things and not so good things but hey What MIYA AND MAYA have done where for Tatsuya. So please in To Stand at the Pinncale dont make Maya and the Yotsuba the bad Guys, let Tatsuya understand Maya. Because man can see that the only thing she wishes for is for her Spiritual Son to have a happy Live and mess/tease him a little. But Your Story are very interessting and very good Writen. With no Grammars. But pls dont make Maya and the YOtsuba the Bad Guys, because they are NOT!

Your Stories where so good but with this its just TRASH! I dont like how it is going for me there is only one LOGICAL Pair since Vol 1 and that is Tatsuya x Miyuki, no Pairng is more perfet. Other Pairng would ruin and destroy the Story complete and would it make a 2nd Rate or 3rd Rate Story.

BASTARD ! (sorry!) Dont make MAYA the bad Woman! All say she only use Tatsuya and Miyuki. Ok maybe she use Miyuki but only to make Tatsuya happy! Can u not see that she truly loves Tatsuya as much as she can love someone? She deserves a Happy Ending of what has happend to her and her Family. Hell Maya and Miya lost there Parents very young. Both couldnt love Tatsuya like they wished, because of his Godly Powers! Hell i even would say he is the reincarnation of ShivaHindu God of Destruction! So please DONT MAKE MAYA THE BADWOMAN/THE EVIL! Because she is not. She, Tatsuya, Miyuki and the WHOLE Yotsuba deserve a FUCKING HAPPY END! Hope u can also bring Tatsuyas and Miyukis other Family in the ABE Clan. Would be cool if they would be the Sponsor, because they are most likely the most powerful Ancient users and have much political Power in the Old Days. They are also a very ancient Clan.