Wow. I started reading this story but just couldn't continue. Your grasp of grammar and spelling is truly shocking. I recommend you take some English lessons before continuing.

I loved this story! Don't leave us hangin'!

Heads up, I'm going to write my story that you reviewed again. Apparently people aren't too happy of what I did. So I hope you understand and thanks for you review. I enjoy reading your story as well.

This story is very interesting and has me intrigued. However, my only critique is you need to run a spell check and have someone proofread the story before publishing. I found myself rereading several lines trying to interpret what it was supposed to say due to typos and grammatical errors (i.e. fallow instead of follow, canister instead of consider, etc). If you don't have anyone, send it to me and I'll proofread and run spell checks on it for you. By all means though, continue the story please.

Interesting story. Continue if you please.

no, you will NOT take this story out! You're just going to leave us hanging like that?

dany is coming back

You did great with this chapter.

Nice beginning. I'd love to know what happens in the later chapters. Update!

You have a great start here, I can hardly wait for more to be uploaded.