I now remember why i abandoned this story: Shepard acts like the pathetic, worthless womyn is in here. Instead of seeking revenge for all that has been done by the Old Ones on her universe she goes all lovey-dubbly, instead of repaying blood for blood it goes into mother-hen mode.
Again, that's more than enough for me to dump this pile of bovine refuse.
Hopefully the author has learned in the past month from the BLM guys how wrong this way of thinking is. But on the other hand that requires that he has a testosterone level above that a 90 year old man, and i doubt he has ever had that even once in his life.

And done. What a ride. It had a couple of hiccups (but what story doesn't?), and overall it was a great story and I really enjoyed reading it.

Thank you for writing it.

Yes, please have a sequel

In Warhammer, be it Fantasy or 40K, happy endings are rare

is this warhammer fantasy or 40k?

Is there not a section for fantasy?

It's weird that Shepard doesn't take any magical support in her group when going against an army that's magic heavy and possess troops immune to mundane attacks.

You could have added a reason why the ogres will fight the dwarven and human armies, even if it's just 'they're in the way'. Ogres aren't orcs, they don't go looking for war, just food.

Weird how Shephard hasn't told Belegar they have built flying machines and that Belegar hasn't heard about them, I mean there are dwarfs living in the empire and there are diplomatic and commercial relationship between the two.

I like your idea of having the reapers being some kind of cosmic mecanism to produce anti chaos energy, make them more interesting, the result of a terrible and uncaring experiment. It also goes closer to how they were written in ME 1 (true cosmic horrors à la Lovecraft, impossible to comprehend by mortals).

You could have dropped (ret conned) the Leviathan bit out of ME, it would have made more sense.

"rumors of Skaven in other lands, trying to set up a new capital"

You should have explained how the previous capital got destroyed and by who, since it's not in the Empire. Or if you've changed the canon, fine, it should had been explained

Love the story, and it’s written great!

You know (well it look like you don't, or chose to ignore) that the skaven live not only under the Empire, with their capital Skavenblight in Tilea and multiple fortresses and cities even further away (Hell pit up North, Crookback mountain in the East for example), so removing them from under the cities of the Empire won't do much to reduce the skaven to famine. The Skaven are stated to be powerful enough to crush the human kingdoms if they stopped their infighting; a large scale attack by the Empire would have been a good enough reason for the clans to set appart their divisions, at least for the time to crush the Empire. They also don't seem to use much their best weapons (assassins, Pestilens plague, Skyre weapons, grey seer magic) against the Empire.

I'm not saying that's impossible, just like the situation isn't explained enough to avoid a suspension of disbelief.

The rest is cool though.

"she's too jaded and cynical"

I didn't much that impression from what I've read; or at least it doesn’t fit with her blushing like that. On the other hand, Felix as a charming womaniser is spot on.

The rest is cool.

Shepard felt a little like a Mary Sue in this chapter