What a great story. So cute. The challenge, the chase, and the capture was so entertaining. I could totally see this happening. You took a scene from the opening of the game (which was probably meant to be nothing more than eye candy) and gave it a whole back story of its own. Nice touch.

I really enjoyed it, and I didn't think the ending was that bad, it makes sense if you want it to match the game.

I really loved it you wrote it very well. If you ever become an author with a published book, I would read it. :) You described things so well!

As to the person who flamed this, SHUT UP! It is how somethings are! It is in the real word too so GET OVER IT! It is the way things go! Like Michelle explained it is also a genre type. This fan fiction was also writen beautifully! Don't slam it for this, some like to read these things. Some like it, some love it, some dislike it and others just hate it. Like the old saying goes: "If you don't have something nice to say, don't say it at all."

(shudder) creppy.

... But aside from the foreshadowing, it was absolutely flufftastic.

I think I should stick with that one, yeah. Flufftastic. _

He he. _ Do adorable. _

Aw! (glompage) so flufftasmic, flufftastic, fluffgasmic, fluffabulous, take your pic. _

(has the insane urge to start singing Moonlight)

Squee man, squee

(jumps around happily) So(breath)o

...o cute. _

XD So adorable

_ I feel happy.

... for some reason I want to laugh now. XD

Aw. Cute little-kid style love! well, maybe a little older than little kid.

teenager. fine.

i gotta stop arguing with myself.

seriously though, i like it a lot! read darkside, you say? okay!

cool fic

~#keito#~

Aww they didn't do anything naughty? Hehe sorry.. I'm still a little... stoked from your dark RxS fic.

Ended just right. Good job.

;giggles; Cute. Riku swims the way I do. Yay! It's surprising that Tidus isn't great at swimming. He's an excellent Blitzball player (though not when I'm in control) and that's major swimming. lol...