Dude, you don't put mushrooms in pho! Blasphemy. you put it in bun or ho tieu.

Good job

Man you really scruwed up big time, you didn’t even enroll yukihira soma. He was part of the anime too

I hope you don't take my criticism the wrong way. Your readers just want you to improve!

*correction: thing

Peace~

I apologize but I will have to stop reading at this point. While your story has a nice plot its been executed poorly, I have no qualms with the plot I think Naruto gaining the First Seat is a big ambition just like his ambition to become Hokage in the series but let me ask you this.

After Naruto achieved the First Seat what now? In my opinion the first few chapters had been interesting but after Naruto achieving First Seat it looked as if the next chapters are just void...

When describing Nakiri Erina's win it felt lacking. Sure the cheers of student were present but are you sure that's all there is to it? What about the judges, her opponent, the atmosphere of the entire arena?

Not to mention all of the chapters are EXTREMELY rushed; from a possible candidate then quitting immediately then getting the First Seat etcetera. You see where I'm going?

It would have been nice if there were some proper character introductions like for instance Lin Qi and Eishi Tsukasa.

Finally the think that irritated me the most was the fact that you replaced "you" with "u". If it seems like its nothing to you it shows tells readers what kind of writer you are. I would have kept reading till the end if you had just spelled this correctly. If you can't spell "you" properly why should I read a fanfic that's done half heartedly?

I hope you don't take this criticism in the wrong way your readers just want you to improve!

Peace~

I just want to say that this story is great, and if you wanted to continue this story maybe you can make Naruto Graham problem in the opening season 2 because in here there will be character development emotion between naruto and shogukegi character, and my opinion about 3 chapter (you write in chapter 9) I think that will be good arc in this fanfic. and I think that favorite or follow a story doesn't mean that you read a story again but waiting for the new chapter because they trust you to find an idea to continue the story. (and if you consider rewite please give us a warning chap in this story !)

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You are not even trying to be original if I wanted this storyline I would have just watched the anime . I hate unoriginal slugs like you

too bad you stopped writing this story
it truly was amazing and had a lot of potential
guess I'll never get to know how it end after all

can u continue this story

The story is abandoned... NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!

fucking awesome fic

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lol funny so far

I am sorry but this whol explanation sounds like the bunch of typical Marty Sue creating plots jammed in. Hypnosis, time travel, harems, magic and whatever else.

Maybe it's my opinion, but crossovers are not about jamming your favourite character, breaking all the canons of the fandom chosen just for the sakr of awesomeness of your OP character.