The Fuckin Opening Got Me XD

That Was Good

Maybe Ash wouldn’t, but Ash would understand the need to kill them. If he’s killing people who do nothing but murder, rape, and assault others, then the world would only be a better place after their deaths. I always hate it when fics have their characters be like “we’re no better than them if we kill them” or some shit like that. Of course your better, you’re killing evil people.

I draw the line at MPREG, so I'm done here

This is a good fanfiction

Hi I just wanna let you know that I really love this story. I was really surprised to see people call it unoriginal just because it's an "Ash gets betrayed" story. It makes me genuinely mad! You have a far better take on the concept than anyone else I've seen, and the way you write the Pokemon characters is very nice. I'm just gonna make a list of things I like in this story if you don't mind '

1. The people who betrayed Ash didn't just do it because they randomly saw him as weak out of nowhere. You actually came up with a real reason.

2. The redeemed people actually felt bad about what they did.

3. You didn't use a cop out to let Ash understand his Pokemon (AKA aura.)

4. You didn't turn Ash all edgy after his friends turned against him. While yes, sometimes the emotions and thoughts you try to convey are kinda off, you actually attempt to make him seem human.

5. Your choice to give Ash pokemon that many other writers wouldn't (Shuckle, Floette, Psyduck...)

6. You haven't don't anything too extreme with the traitors. Other fics will have the traitors randomly do extremely terrible things (murder, r*pe...) because they want the shock value. I really hope this doesn't happen in this fic :(

7. Again, the Pokemon. You just have such a unique take on your portrayal of them and I love it. I know I said this was a list of likes, but I really wanna see more of Ash's new Pokemon! Sorry if that sounds pushy, I just really wanna know about his other friends...

I might come back and listen more things I like later, and maybe some things I dislike? I don't think I have any major issues with this fic, but there are some small things I kinda think could be tweaked a bit BUT I'M NOT THE WRITER SO IF I OFFEND YOU IM SORRY D:

I kinda just did this on a whim because I was about to read the story again so yeah, that's why this comment didn't have any structure, sorry!

Will there be a showdown with Barry as well? It would be interesting to see how Ash feels about how Barry's attitude and highbrow snobbery get in the way of common sense. I would guess that Barry's father would be disappointed in the way Barry was acting. Good story, and I hope that you can get over your writer's block.

Spelling Check... Wooper not Whopper. Unless Whopper is its name. Good story so far.

he should have an Abra,Metang,Bagon,mewtwo,maybe mew because it wel is Mew,And a trapich and hopefully all his pokemon are fully evolved by the end. this is just my opinion lol. I like this story even though im a Rayshippet. love it and keep up the Excellent work

what about butterfree and Lapras? does he have the 30 Taurus?

This was so good I can't wait for the next chapter

Woah, i thought this was abandoned :O Glad i never deleted it

Quite honestly it sounds more like Ash-Bashing than Misty-Bashing.

Please update

At first she definitely was a bitch, but around the power of one movie I grew to like her(because Ash nearly drowned and misty was so worried and prepared to do everything she could to save him)

So there won't be any legendary crisis that Ash needs to help stop? Now that's a first. Though, is Squishy still there?