I am absolutely loving this!

Loved it

Things are interesting and a lot more different. I hope rose gets over herself, seriously. lol

Wouldn't Lori have given birth first?

ok Lori's the main character but the story still revolves around Bella. I don't see Jasper staying away from his mate because of edwierdo decision. I also don't see him leaving his mate not blood singer but mate behind unprotected because Edward thinks it's best. the story still revolves around edward and Bella's selfishness. you should clean this up if you intend for the story to actually be about Jasper and Lori

Hope to read more soon.

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Please continue!

Lori's sister was a newborn in Victoria's attack. Her birth father is one now, and was seemingly involved in a kidnapping attempt on Lori. Has Lori not considered that her mother and the rest of her human family may already be in danger? Given his past, I'd consider it a near certainty that he'd make a play for his ex-wife.

On another note, will we be introduced soon to the rest of the Whitlock clan?

I became allergic to mangoes one year, had eaten them many times before yet anytime i eat them now my face swells up. U can become allergic to things over time. It sucks -.-

Please update soon can't wait to read more

Please continue!

It would be interesting if her father became a vampire gangster boss or something like that.

I’d personally prefer for there to not be any supernatural creatures that weren’t mentioned in the books already. I do like your story so far though!

Glad she did ok!

Please continue!