You've done a great job with this!

Keep it as is it is amazing I love how you make it like its actually the ultimate spider man please don't change it

I love this story but i would also love to see what you have in mind for the story in the future. However. More drama would be amazing but keep the lemons tho.

Continue

Nice story. There's nothing wrong with re-editing or overhauling a few chapters, so if you feel like they're not up to your standards now, and you feel like you want to change them up, then I'd say go for go for it.

Just finished binge reading everything up until this point, and the story is interesting and has potential. The first few chapters are a little rough around the edges, but as you've said, you were in middle school when this first started, so it's to be expected that your later chapters would have improved with your writing as you got older.

The smut is good. I wouldn't make any drastic changes. It's descriptive and enjoyable to read. The story arc though, earlier on wasn't bad, but in my opinion, isn't as good as the later parts in the story. The whole thing with Green Goblin and the Sinister Six and trying to get Parker to join was just kind of all over the place? Then again, I didn't get into Disney XD's Marvel Spider-Man TV show, nor have I ever actually heard of the Spider-Man Web Warriors storyline before, so that's probably influenced by my lacking knowledge of the TV show and storyline.

I think that the best course of action would be to try to write more drama into the story. There's hints and bits and pieces of it that's there, but you don't see it a lot. As before, the smut's good; I'm kind of wondering what other heroines and civilians will be joining Spidey's web of lovers. The action was okay in the beginning, but I can tell it's improved since then, so I don't think that there would be too much to improve on there.

Do what you feel works best.

Middle school? Wow. All the props then. Especially when comparing it to so many other stories here. Smutty or not.

Can hear her gasp but not the sounds of thrusting, slapping, hard breathing, whimpering...

I'm assuming that shes pregnant.

And natasha is made out to be the avengers cum dump. That actually annoys me.

"Stamina" 1rd lays nope.

As long as it is continued I’m fine

to be honest, i think that more drama would make this fic a lot of good.
also, trying to mix "spectacular spider-man" and "ultimate spider-man" would work better in my opinion than "amazing spider-man"
neither way, i wish you good luck.

I would suggest improving the first few chapters, like better grammar and so on, while keeping the story as close to how it is right now.

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