Always great to see another chapter to such a great story!

I absolutely adore this story! It's refreshing to finally find something truly unique and so well developedespecially in first person. Thank you so much for posting!

Hi,

Your Ekrizdis character feels like an unnecessary complication. Perhaps the utility will become clearer in the next chapters.

Cheers

Old-Crow

Quick additional note here, and I'm surprised no one has commented this elsewhere (unless I missed it): your grammar on your dialogue is incorrect. The beginning of this chapter for instance:

"They're all looking at you differently." Hermione tells me as we walk to the Thestral-drawn carriages after getting off the train.

"Busy summer." I smirk.

"He's important now." Ginny, having caught up with us on the train, accompanies us to the carraiges.

"I was important before." I retort, to which she rolls her eyes.

Each of those lines of dialogue should end with a comma, not a period, because they are part of the whole sentence outside the quotation marks.

"They're all looking at you differently," Hermione tells me as we walk to the Thestral-drawn carriages after getting off the train.

"Busy summer," I smirk.

"He's important now," Ginny, having caught up with us on the train, accompanies us to the carriages.

"I was important before," I retort, to which she rolls her eyes.

is the correct form. To know what I'm saying, try reading the portion after the quotes as if it had no dialogue before it. Sounds weird, doesn't it? That's because it's not the whole sentence. And sentences only have one period in them.

Hi,

I love coming back to this tale. Your Harry, the consulting detective scene at Scrimgeour's house is flat-out fine storytelling.

cheers

Old-Crow

I really find it funny how Dumbledore doesnt just stop harry from touching things. My reactions to him picking those wands up would not have been calm, more like “NO dont do that, try one by one!”. And if i had told an 11 y/o child not to touch somethinf, and saw them attempt to, i’d really try to stop them lol. I guess his old age is more like “if it break it breaks, no hard done blah blah blah”

Hedwig's sexual orientation seems weird to me for a couple reasons:

1) Her origin. Was she "gay" as a bird? I find that unlikely. Why would that change with her becoming human?

2) It seems like you are just doing it as a convenience. Like, you decided to make her a human, made her very attached to Harry in this very innocent, becoming-less-innocent-as-she adapts, way. THEN decided you weren't making a harem story and needed her out of the way romantically. it just feels... odd.

This is I think my major criticism of the story as a whole, I think. I'm really enjoying it, but it feels very meandering in some ways, as if you don't have a clear enough vision of where it is going and therefore can't lay the groundwork to build towards that end. And some chapters have seemed quite disjointed like you had ideas for, and wrote, specific scenes, but just didn't bother putting the work into making natural connections between them. Still, these are things that can only come with experience, and so far the story keeps my attention, so keep up the good work.

“It seems that wizards are even worse than regular people when it comes to gender equality.” Where do people get this idea? There is not a single hint of gender inequality in the wizarding world in any of the seven books.

“It seems that wizards are even worse than regular people when it

Damn... I really love this story, really wish that you didn't have Hedwig break up especially when everything seemed to go so well, but you're right, relationships don't last forever. So congrats on doing something many authors aren't willing to do because eof their fear of setting their fans on fire

Loooool. Totally didn't see him outright naming the assassin like that. I assumed the reason he hadn't was cause he didn't know. Hilarious, that.

Also, the detective thing is real cool, looking forward to more of that.

I've been loving the concept of this story but I'm not familiar with the writing style and it throws me off. The progression feels disjointed and we don't get to see the full picture of things happening. We only get snapshots of the 'important' events and the aftermath isn't really mentioned. I find it somewhat disorienting but I like the overall feel of the story and I'm looking forward to where it's going. A lot seems possible from here.

oh god, Dobby freed by a lacy red bra. Considering how much he grew to adore socks in canon ith it being the item that freed him, I shudder to think of a Dobby adorning multiple bras of various styles and colors.

I think that scene with Linter might be the most wholesome thing I've read in HP fanfiction in a good long while. Nice work.

Good God was I excited to see this in my notifications list! This is great! I'm going to have to re read this chapter again cause it got nutty quick. One of my most favorite stories on this site, such a cool concept and well written time hops. Can't wait to see what's next. Stay safe out there!