This is a pretty good story. Interesting enough premise and has some pretty good characterization going on. Any mistakes or typos were fairly minor. It could have been more exciting and/or detailed in some ways. Like the action scenes, they worked, but did not stand out much. Then there could have been more about characters like Kreacher and how he fit to everything. Also, while it did not seem like it was particularly relevant to this story, it might have been interesting to go into some more about the hallows and the resurrection stone in particular. In any case this was well worth the read and I am surprised this story doesn't have more hits.

*snorts* Seriously, Hawkeye?

I don't know why this story has so few reviews, especially when I see the number of reviews some very inferior stories have in comparison.

Overall you had good characterisation and it's refreshing to read a story where everyone does not live happily ever after. What these characters went through in canon was traumatic and you address this very well indeed. The fractured relationships was done very well indeed; authentic and entirely believable.

Some minor room for improvement would be on your battle scenes - a little more polish and perhaps a more personal point of view? Battle is visceral and that needs to come out in the writing. But that's a small point so don't think I didn't enjoy it. Overall I thought it was a well plotted, well paced and well written story that deserves more recognition than it has received. I'm looking forward to reading the sequel.

Thank you for writing it.

this is my first review. A great read dont let people tell you your choice with characters is wrong. every time I read I see these characters from a different point of view and that can only be good.

Poor Broken bastard,you write it so well its scary.

So sad for Harry, I've been there.

Wow,this is certainly a different Harry Potter than I've read about previously. Can't wait to read more.

“meeting with him”, not “meeting wit him”.
There aren't enough hateful and loathsome words in the whole vocabulary of the English language to adequately express how much I loathe Gawain Robards.

Este capitulo fue GENIAL

adopted brother? Who?

Wow

reading this while battling pregnancy hormones may not have been the best idea as i did cry through a large portion of it. However i highly enjoyed reading your story. i would recommend going through with a beta to fix inconsistencies and spelling and grammar errors however.

This was a nice story, and I'm surprised at the lack of reviews. No, it was not perfect, and there were number of things I did not especially like about it, but it certainly is better than a lot of other stories that have hundreds of reviews. Obviously, the fact that there is virtually no romance in the story will keep the reviews down, but so be it.

My primary suggestion would be to improve your dueling scenes. Quite often the duelers threw spells or took actions that made no sense at all. For example, in the duel in Knockturn Alley earlier in the story, Harry cast a stinging hex, hitting his opponent. Why on earth would he cast a stinging spell. If he could hit him with a stinger, he could have hit him with a stunner. There were a number of instances like that throughout the story. To be fair, this is a problem in a lot of stories where I feel that authors do not think through their dueling scenes.

Nevertheless, I generally liked how Harry had to battle his demons, and his semi insanity was interesting and effective. Overall, it was a fine story, and I thank you for your efforts. G.

Noooooooooo! Malfoy being the man behind it all! What?!

Posted before I finish the chapter

just a quick question. In this chapter when Ron asks Harry when he last saw Hermione, Harry replies saying end of August, is it meant to be August or June? Considering the previous chapter Hermione says July for the Law and then in the next chapter it's indicated that it's currently July.