More please?

REALLY your a good author but I wish you finished the story

I think it's good overall, but I do believe writing the same series of events is slightly unecessary .

I personally want more of this and wonder what could happen if Anabeth found out about his abusment. Also after leaving Luke and Rachel knocked out, and of coarse with the bill *wink wink* i want to see their reaction to eachother the next day. Basically i just want MOOORRRREEEE

dude.
Your story.
It's.
It is.
You amaze me. In a fabulous way.
Oh and don't worry about weird cause I love weird! _(_)_

Good but very long

I have to say this looks interesting. While I think that the high school thing is mostly filled with cliche stories that just copy from each other I think that within the hundreds there are a couple of hidden gems. I believe this story to have the potential for that.

While I am personally not a fan of Rachel always being portrayed as an antagonist it is just my opinion. I just feel that's just what people do because she was a love rival, while in my opinion she is a great character and it saddens me when she is just portrayed as a one dimensional, shallow antagonist for no other purpose than to make annabeth look good.

That doesnt really makes the story worst, just slightly less enjoyable because of personal preference.
Regardless my interest has been picked, and out of all the docens of high school stories I believe this might be one of the few good ones but only time will tell.

I shall read the other chapters tomorrow. So good job taking an over used premis and using a very unique and interesting plot. Until next time.

Oh, and i forgot to mention. The way you wrote it is a little weird and kind of annoying, because im just reading the same thing over again with a few changes which is really repetitive and unnecessary. Honestly, you don't need both povs, especially since theres only one or two lines where you really want to show What percys thinking. I would suggest third person, or omniscient pov, because you could include the thoughts of both characters at the same time without repeating the same lines again.
Example:
From percy's pov:
"No, put them there." I wasnt planning to, but i placed them right on her back, pulling her closer.
From annabeths pov:
"No put them there" he hesitated, but put his hands on my back, bringing us closer.
You see how similar they are and how reading ALL of the lines twice in a row would be kind of...boring? Instead, you could write in third person:
"No, put them there," Annabeth said. Percy hesitated. He didn't plan to do that, but he put his hands on her back and pulled them closer.
It combines both versions into one with ALL of the information and thoughts there

SAME! My brother just got his license and there is no way I'm letting him drive me to school. Alone. (he's going to be a senior and I'm going to be a freshman at the same school). Hes responsible enough as a driver but he SPEEDS LIKE CRAZY, which he gets from my parents, of course.
Anyways, love this story and all!

Yes! and No! I like that it's the first day they met and they already kissed but as always something (or someone) had to ruin what could be a perfect love story, I like the story so far plz keep writing it

Q_Q

I am speechless.

a Seaweed brain gets to do what he does and that is protect a wise girl. At times Annabeth seems a bit naive though.

Can u tell me your ideas? I can tell you my opinion but if you don't want to I'm fine with that. Your really creative in these stories where do you get your inspiration?I was abused until I left the house and I have expirence with what u hiding the evidence! Just if you need any advice just tell me

HOW DARE YOU PUT A CLIFFY! * Throws dagger and cookies* Also for the Question of the Chapter, can you PM me what characters you are putting in? (On a totally unrelated note with XxDarkDalekXx) Did you know American space suits cost almlst 12 million dollars to manufacture. OHHHH! You could make Clarrise and Frank step-siblings and they both meet up in gym class while their background is that the step-dad (and dad) is currently over-seas and they both have Hazel and Chris with them. Leo could be in workshop and have a famous inventor and they meet at lunch or something if Leo is being bullied. (Unless he was in the first chapter I forgot. Also im doing the random fact in every comment I make on the chapters.)

OH MY GOSH!THIS IS SO GOOD!WHAT HAPPENS NEXT?! Does Percy beat up Gabe or something...or is it the other way around?